No1 on here will make it big. Thats life folks.

[Pte.Pelkey.]

I change, you stay the same
I evolve and your still tryin to solve
the same damn puzzle we all draw.
we all fall at some point
get stumped at some joint.
but at some point we go astray
and pave our own way down this road
called life, see I'm more like right
when I say I'm like ice.
I get heated, it's a melt down

Should you break down....when nothing else works out?
Or save yourself from sorrow
and forget about yesterday, begin a new tomorrrow.
Offer up your love....and pray that it's enough.
CAUSE WE ALL REMEMBER
YEA WE FALL, REMEMBER
MEMORIES AND DREAMS.
cuase we all fall but we can be redeemed.

I'm kinda blown away by, the unknown
also, the deep depths of space and the warzone.
To be or not to be, centuries of lives have
gone by, a load of global working spies mobalize.
I can't comprehend the big picture, in the end
if it doesn't even matter then why are we shy
why do die such pointless deaths? and how
does a guy go around thinking he can take ur breath?

He see's them all laughin and having fun
though its not a porblem he can't solve
just to get involved is hard enough.

maybe im just a little bit nutz
a little lost at times, must be kind
well mankinds so brittle
im inclined to twiddle my thumbs
and not ask anyone what they think.
I need to retrace, my steps
count my steps and hold my breath.

I pack my axe and head out back
slowly close the curtains
going over in my mind will this
be worth it, perfect kill
A certain pill that can't be perscribed
in a mind so fragile, agile is mine
anguished with pain strained into insanity
I kno if i change there won't be anyone who
will be able to handle me, a man you see.

Someone got shot again
Shock straight to my heart
like I knew them personally
learn from me, I write art
and strike thoughts, destraught.


I was placed on this earth
and since birth I was first
in my mind I was divine

Life & Logic - The Living Story (2009)

[gutawafang]

Lack of multis. Just rhymes.

[Fa-Q]

You suck donkey diiiick

[Solace]

That was disgusting, why would you even post that kind of disgrace to writing?

[Solace]

I read it, there were barely any rhymes, the stupidest lines ever trying to be deep, flow...there was none

eg.
Someone got shot again
Shock straight to my heart
like I knew them personally
learn from me, I write art
and strike thoughts, destraught.

I see 4 rhymes, 5 lines, and 1 of them was an internal. Okay...whats the flow? It's practically talking.

It was an extremely bad attempt at being poetic.

I was placed on this earth
and since birth I was first
in my mind I was divine

It seems like the rhymes are placed randomly anywhere. Thanks, you were divine in your mind...Since birth you were first...Who gives a fuck give us a reason to turn opinion to fact.

Therefore I have reason for calling it shit, Scott.

[Just Silver]

more of a poem but the title is killing it its long and plain out being an ass lol

i liked it but with comments like youve been getting i feel out of place

Great piece work on flow if this was a rap if not pretty damn good
spottin

[Pte.Pelkey.]

Lol thanks solace for disecting some random lines i threw to together, I wasn't writing a song here

just random thoughts. And multis? meh I kno how to rap this, all that matters.

Props to scott and eminem silver for being out of place. and yah its an ass title but I thought it would draw more people in haha

[Solace]

Well I fed it as a song, so I'll take you meant to write a poem now. And feeding this as a poem, I'm not going to say it was very well done cause I think you could've used better imagery and vocabulary. Pretty average. 6-7/10

[Pte.Pelkey.]

Well I fed it as a song, so I'll take you meant to write a poem now. And feeding this as a poem, I'm not going to say it was very well done cause I think you could've used better imagery and vocabulary. Pretty average. 6-7/10

jury and judge combined eh lol thanks tho