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Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 20th, '09, 06:45

If my heart has a song, then she sings mine,
Everyday she brings a line,
And when its winter, she's my springtime,
What if I carve her name in a tree,
Next to mine in a heart,
Would she want the same for me,
What if we had time apart,
I'm wonderin where to put,
The thought that for you,
I would walk a thousand miles barefoot,
My heart is full, cause Bre is there,
Around you a beat is rare,
I feel insignificant, with the heat of your stair,
I just felt your face, and I melted in place,
I see that beauty mark on your right cheek,
Fight to speak,
But I can't be responsible for the poetry that might leak,



I know these words hurt,
But I also know, I don't deserve her,
Thinking of her, today will be my last day,
All my memories of her past away,
Even though in my mind, they asked to stay,
When I met her, my heart was full and new,
Now its been trampled, like the sole of a shoe,
I'm desolate, lost without a cause,
Alone, all I think about are my flaws,
I look deep into your eyes,
And my inner core cries,
While her strong spirit, soars in skies,
I'm stuck trying to fly, but I only crash,
I was a burning candle, but now I'm lonely ash,



Knowing she's with someone else, makes me start to weep,
Then when I'm around her,
Up again starts my heart beat,
My head is full, of thoughts of her,
So I write and now my lead is dull,
When I'm around her, I feel nothing less than incredible,
I feel high on top of a pedistal,
Even her imperfections are perfect,
Around her my words get,
jumbled and still nothings occured yet,
And even if I have to stair at her profile,
Even if its a thousand jokes, all I want is a slow smile,
Sometimes I look in her eyes,
Shook and surprised,
That she would even look back,
(Even look back)
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby DƎRDYPK » Nov 20th, '09, 06:52

fucking aYe bro :'( that shit makes me wanna cry...
I feel the same way about a girl but she's with someone else :'(
anyway..this was really deep..my favorite parts were

Fa-Q wrote:If my heart has a song, then she sings mine,
Everyday she brings a line,
And when its winter, she's my springtime,


Fa-Q wrote:I know these words hurt,
But I also know, I don't deserve her,
Thinking of her, today will be my last day,
All my memories of her past away,
Even though in my mind, they asked to stay,
When I met her, my heart was full and new,
Now its been trampled, like the sole of a shoe,


that's the kinda stuff that makes me wanna break down start crying & headbutting walls :(
this was very nice man :y:
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 20th, '09, 18:12

^The two he said are sick. Beautiful stuff big homie.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 20th, '09, 22:56

Yah-hah wrote:^The two he said are sick. Beautiful stuff big homie.

That's Mister Big Homie to you sir and thanks Derdy
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 05:58

Idk if I should have a chorus for this one or not
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 21st, '09, 20:46

:'( :'( :'( Awww! That is so sad! Omigod! I'm crying right now. Omigod! So sweet. You ever told her how you feel? and also, were you guys friends before the dude took her away from you?
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 21:26

eminemgirl1234 wrote::'( :'( :'( Awww! That is so sad! Omigod! I'm crying right now. Omigod! So sweet. You ever told her how you feel? and also, were you guys friends before the dude took her away from you?

Well she came to my school and she was with him and yea were friends....sorry for making you cry lol
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 21st, '09, 21:34

Fa-Q wrote:
eminemgirl1234 wrote::'( :'( :'( Awww! That is so sad! Omigod! I'm crying right now. Omigod! So sweet. You ever told her how you feel? and also, were you guys friends before the dude took her away from you?

Well she came to my school and she was with him and yea were friends....sorry for making you cry lol


What did you do?! Shit, If Marshall came to My school, with a chick on his arm, We would be fighting! I'll be fighting him and the chick! Shit! Sorry. :sweating:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 21:38

eminemgirl1234 wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:
eminemgirl1234 wrote::'( :'( :'( Awww! That is so sad! Omigod! I'm crying right now. Omigod! So sweet. You ever told her how you feel? and also, were you guys friends before the dude took her away from you?

Well she came to my school and she was with him and yea were friends....sorry for making you cry lol


What did you do?! Shit, If Marshall came to My school, with a chick on his arm, We would be fighting! I'll be fighting him and the chick! Shit! Sorry. :sweating:

Haha well I'm happy to report my giving her one of the songs Monday
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 21st, '09, 21:43

^EEEEEK! I WONDER WHAT SHE'S GONNA SAY! OMIGOD! EEEEK! I WANNA KNOW EVERYTHING! OKAY? I WANNA KNOW EVERYTHING! PM ME THE DETS, ALRIGHT?
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 22:20

eminemgirl1234 wrote:^EEEEEK! I WONDER WHAT SHE'S GONNA SAY! OMIGOD! EEEEK! I WANNA KNOW EVERYTHING! OKAY? I WANNA KNOW EVERYTHING! PM ME THE DETS, ALRIGHT?

Haha ok chicka
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby mcZu » Nov 21st, '09, 22:31

After reading the last line, I felt some chills running up my spine. I think that's all that needs to be said, I won't go indepth about complexity and such.

It had an impact on me, so to me, it's fucking great poetry.
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 21st, '09, 22:39

Wow...thanks Zu means alot
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby mcZu » Nov 21st, '09, 23:22

No problem, man. I'm just being straight up, you did a great job.
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Re: Another Song About Bre

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 22nd, '09, 00:18

Yeah agree with Zu. Yeah man wanna know how that goes
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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