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Con Artist (JFK Sniper)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 22nd, '09, 20:52

Anyone dare to approach me?
Better make sure your prayers are holy
Or these lyrical flares will slowly
Reduce you to a pile of MC ashes
Starting wars while I'm ending clashes
With a impenetrable style defending crashes
Taking basic crime to a third degree
Simply making rhymes be heard and seen
Breaking the "prime and preferred" MCs
You're unable to decipher all my multies
When I cypher with the boldest eye
All these fake writers get old and shy
Out to assassinate all your presidents
Shock value fascinates Baltimore residents
No cure; rapping hate has no medicine
It's mentally hopeless...

Not the typical street naughty con-artist
Claim the discreet Mafia Don's smartest
But, all in all, what is CW without me?
The list of disasters I'm still counting...

Just straight from pages in mythology
Wielding ancient and ageless technology
Worship the latest and greatest anthology
See, the lyrical titan is merely burning
Foes fearful of might and clearly learning
No miracles to brighten their severely turning
Situation; corruption in these minds
Spontaneous eruption with weak rhymes
Possibly create a disruption from behind
Speaking to devils with hell's microphone
Eating wasted MCs like a cell's lysosomes
Hip hop synthesized from a jail's ribosomes
Harsh words are verbally beating
My nemesis until he is internally bleeding
Vampiric descent; be mercilessly feeding
On whack rappers...

Not the typical street naughty con-artist
Claim the discreet Mafia Don's smartest
But, all in all, what is CW without me?
The list of disasters I'm still counting...

Feedback would be greatly appreciated. Will feed yours if you leave a link as well. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Con Artist (JFK Sniper)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 23rd, '09, 03:22

Bump. :sweating:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Live free. Die hard.
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Re: Con Artist (JFK Sniper)

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 23rd, '09, 03:34

Good job. Not one of your best, but still good. Flow was alrite, multies were good. I didnt dig first 2 lines of the chorus (idk why), but the 2nd half was great. My fav lines

Speaking to devils with hell's microphone
Eating wasted MCs like a cell's lysosomes


But what I liked the most, is that 4th-line-change thing you did. Its very unexpected and creative. Well done :y:
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Re: Con Artist (JFK Sniper)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 24th, '09, 00:47

Wic_Kid wrote:Good job. Not one of your best, but still good. Flow was alrite, multies were good. I didnt dig first 2 lines of the chorus (idk why), but the 2nd half was great. My fav lines

Speaking to devils with hell's microphone
Eating wasted MCs like a cell's lysosomes


But what I liked the most, is that 4th-line-change thing you did. Its very unexpected and creative. Well done :y:


Thanks. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


-Black Star, Definition

Live free. Die hard.
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Re: Con Artist (JFK Sniper)

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 24th, '09, 01:04

The lines wic said were my favorite. Pretty good peice though man for real. Any feed for my new stuff? But yeah man dope as always bro :y:
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