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What I Am

Postby Just Silver » Dec 12th, '09, 01:38

I have fell many a pits, and tell a sick as it gets,
tale then finish the shit, and when not on duty.
i run into this, detrimental debts to fennel chefs
adrenal, a cooks rage while cooking instrumentals
looking for a mental sentinel to do a gentle perennial
type of search so when my hype is on the urge
of stalkers and killers, and that i'll be dead cause im a walking vanilla,
skinned thrilla, of a mended together, Ben Stiller, with ten gorillas,
im hopping out of my head i cant deal a,nother moment with my cover stolen,
need a rugged open ,eye my first two were stolen, the verse spoke
with, no chin the face of truth is broken, take a new approach with,
a big old case of mold spit, that will be digested fear factor is back
my savage attacks, blast off with some ravaging facts, that put
the salvaging tracks, into a palish "gold" bag ,and then get thrown to rivers
so sick why own any livers im just gonna drink as soon as i getem
i might rent them and fuck over retailers credit sucks just look how they mail them, back to me and forget my address, who i am is what I chant, confuse and confess.



(really quick shit you might need a dictionary lol) Thought id do something because im hyped for my bro coming over havent seen him in like almost a year
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Re: What I Am

Postby Just Silver » Dec 13th, '09, 05:16

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Re: What I Am

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 05:22

looking for a mental sentinel to do a gentle perennial

Dope single lined...this was above average of what you usually drop...keep it up homie
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Re: What I Am

Postby Just Silver » Dec 13th, '09, 05:37

Fa-Q wrote:looking for a mental sentinel to do a gentle perennial

Dope single lined...this was above average of what you usually drop...keep it up homie

thanks I tried a different approach
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Re: What I Am

Postby Just Silver » Dec 19th, '09, 21:57

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Re: What I Am

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 19th, '09, 22:01

Just Silver wrote:bump

Multies seem natural to you, which is a clear factor in determining your technique. :y:

Only major problem was the structure, but it wasn't even that major, so great job overall.

Mind feeding mine? :)

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Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: What I Am

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 20th, '09, 00:38

out standing multies, I was really feeling it :y: entertained me the whole way through, the structure was bad but it was still a great drop :y:
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