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Nimbus - Beautiful

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 12th, '09, 15:41

yeah, I want my 4 comments, check out me and Yah-Hah's collab too

it's not finished but oh well

here's the beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hP55GCFHwe4



(Chorus x2)
It's my mind, It's my world, you're my light, you're my girl
This my life, it unfurls, grasp my time like they pearls
so i write till i'm sore, this pen is useful it seems
elegant rhetoric, describe what's beautiful ta me

(Verse)
it's beauty to me, when it's just you and just me
God's graces, praises to the few that can see
we're faceless, raceless, how could the future be bleak
no sound, no talking, it's just useless to speak
me and you just for weeks, all the seconds passin
the culmination...guess our own creation's magic
always lastin...............strivin and we gettin by
the flame dwindles, dims, but never do we let it die
and i emphasize, our touch is like God's gift
people talk, make comments, but i will not quit
we won't stop, won't end, it's infinite love
swim through flames, climb hills just ta get a hug
just because......we make such a perfect pair
when we're together, it's whatever, i'm not self aware
and how the year's been.......i won't forget it
we been together so long, death could never end it

(Chorus x2)
It's my mind, It's my world, you're my light, you're my girl
This my life, it unfurls, grasp my time like they pearls
so i write till i'm sore, this pen is useful it seems
elegant rhetoric, describe what's beautiful ta me

(Verse)
To whom it may concern i love the morning's cool breeze
everyday i learn, i think, i yearn for just a few things
ta captivate average men, baffle not to battle them
new beats, pad and pen, and silence every now an then
and now and again, a chick to pour my heart out to
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Re: Nimbus - Beautiful

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 12th, '09, 17:51

Alooooot better vocabulary in this one...I liked it 8/10...and multis were better...wasn't in love with the hook but it was ok...I'd like to see a full song...good job nymbus
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Re: Nimbus - Beautiful

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 12th, '09, 17:54

Fa-Q wrote:Alooooot better vocabulary in this one...I liked it 8/10...and multis were better...wasn't in love with the hook but it was ok...I'd like to see a full song...good job nymbus


naw man I'll get that vocab out drop sometime, I really rap like that but I'll try and make it good

but thanks man, and I just like how the chorus goes with the beat, thanks man :y:
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