something i wrote

[lighter fluid]

not a rapper, but i was in the mood to write some bars. i was going for more of an emotional verse than a lyrically skillful one. My syllables are off so if someone wants to help me restructure it, that would be great. give me some feedback please..

have you ever been so messed up in your head
that the hardest thing to do is get out of your bed
you wish you were rich, famous, or even dead
yeah, life is that bad you'd rather leave instead
when you dread your next day like its the last
your fed up with regrets from your bitter past
and amazed at how fast that they amassed
you sat in sadness as the day passed
then you find something to help you outlast
the struggles of live and being mentally harassed
an amazing feeling, like getting some ass
maybe even better, totally unsurpassed
and at last, your back to normal again
confidence is back, no longer stressing
a drug addict going through depression

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good if you're just a beginner...structure was perfect until the last four lines but that's not a big deal...you need (if you do want to pursue this) expand your vocabulary and use more multis...pretty good first drop tho

[Solace]

Nice, quick, general, was alright.