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It's Back

Postby FAME » Dec 18th, '09, 04:01

Listen to the words I speak, this isn’t any meet or greet
My mind fumbled can’t mince meat, can barely read the sheet
Spitting off lines, paying in dimes, forgetting the written rhymes
I’m out of time, no more being kind, or paying fines
My dues are to myself no one else, kicking trophy’s off a shelf
I don’t need any help, I’m doing fine all by myself
Pollution is a nuisance, to my dad it’s a sooth stress
In my ears I can’t choose it, or even start to loose it
No contamination, in my brain its elimination
Which words survive the initiation, most can’t hit the radio station
I’m done putting up a stupid wall, kicking a fucking trolley doll
Funny that now you saw, that all will fall
Raise my hands in victory, this shits in me
A symphony, I command lyrics lyrically
No more regrets in my life, I’ll do what is right
And as I write, the fire ignites,
A spark in my brain excites, creativity back in my sight…


Sudden burst to write some rhymes, feedback appreciated. I'll do the same in return :flower:
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Re: It's Back

Postby FAME » Dec 18th, '09, 15:04

Bump :) I would really appreciate feedback, I thought it flowed really well.
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Re: It's Back

Postby BILI » Dec 19th, '09, 16:05

Its really nice,I liked it,it was simple but still a nice read
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Re: It's Back

Postby FAME » Dec 19th, '09, 22:57

BILI wrote:Its really nice,I liked it,it was simple but still a nice read


Thanks for the feedback :flower:
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