Smithy -

[Element.]

Hey i just was workin on something the other night, its in my Sig tell me what you think and say if i should add more and make it into a song.

[2sDay]

pretty good but your rhymes are a little basic e.g see and me, fame and shame. keep at it

[Solace]

It's okay, but seems like something I've read MILLIONS of times. Why? Because it's so generic it's not even funny. Work on your multies man, why do I always say this to new comers you may wonder? Because it's easier than wordplay and punches.

[Element.]

Ive changed it abit now, check it out.

[classthe_king]

Make it like

I'm sticking to the rap game, for a future in that fame
The rhymes just the exact same, puting me in flat shame
Like its pastime, comin with fast rhymes, askin where this crap came?
Hittin like a reversed rhyme,the first time, tellin myself i'll claim <------Don't know what to put here
thinkin i didnt rehearse on every verse, this man astounds
you'll just stand there winking, thinkin i wont stand my ground?

[Element.]

Make it like

I'm sticking to the rap game, for a future in that fame
The rhymes just the exact same, puting me in flat shame
Like its pastime, comin with fast rhymes, askin where this crap came?
Hittin like a reversed rhyme,the first time, tellin myself i'll claim <------Don't know what to put here
thinkin i didnt rehearse on every verse, this man astounds
you'll just stand there winking, thinkin i wont stand my ground?

dam man that is sick lol cheers for changin some words

[classthe_king]

That took me like 2 minutes, multi's are easy if you just put in some effort

[Element.]

That took me like 2 minutes, multi's are easy if you just put in some effort

yh im startin to do multis alot more now.

[bullet_boy46]

That took me like 2 minutes, multi's are easy if you just put in some effort

yh im startin to do multis alot more now.

smithy you know if edge is realeasin the collab, and class made it dope-er

[Element.]

not sure man