I Can't Breathe

by **gutawafang** » Jan 8th, '10, 02:09

I got a couple of words trapped in the chest
Should I just write them out and rap it in jest
Am I forever cursed or am I just blessed?
I'm picturing the Earth in probably her best dress
I'm so corrupted, no, I'm lost in my imaginations
I can't get outta my admirations and fascinations
I need a saviour to help me out of this damnation
To break the silence of confinement and isolation
It's all darkness, I need a diminutive emnation
The shell of my heart requires incrustation
I'm suffocating, I'm experiencing exasperation
I'm afflicted, there's no need for amplification
My brain cells keep growing in numbers, overpopulation
We know that life gives birth to prevent depletion
So why can't I just retain respiration?
Why'd you remove my lungs without my permission?
I can't breathe...

by **Fa-Q** » Jan 8th, '10, 02:42

Damn Gutaw I love this piece....I wanna see a whole song...great vocabulary...keep it up foreals

by **gutawafang** » Jan 8th, '10, 02:44

Fa-Q wrote:Damn Gutaw I love this piece....I wanna see a whole song...great vocabulary...keep it up foreals

Arigato!

by **Edge** » Jan 8th, '10, 04:32

that was nice bro... sick use of vocab... sometimes people force it put it was nice here :y:

by **gutawafang** » Jan 8th, '10, 04:34

Edge wrote:that was nice bro... sick use of vocab... sometimes people force it put it was nice here

Thanks a lot Edge. :8)

by **gutawafang** » Jan 8th, '10, 05:02

Coleon wrote:most unique style out of anyone on the sight imo

you use words that just fit perfect but aren't common

for real keep it up and I'll stay on the look out

Man, thanks for the compliment man. :worship:

Appreciate the lookout. :happy:

by **Enimee** » Jan 8th, '10, 10:05

definition of creative writing :worship:

i really felt the emotion behind this thanks to your use of such descriptive woords...and it all played a part in the scheme of things which made it enjoyable to read, you stayed on topic and kept a good structure, much love for this post keep at it

by **gutawafang** » Jan 11th, '10, 10:01

PINK wrote:Wow. You have some great writing skills.

Oh thank you. :happy:

Enimee wrote:definition of creative writing
i really felt the emotion behind this thanks to your use of such descriptive woords...and it all played a part in the scheme of things which made it enjoyable to read, you stayed on topic and kept a good structure, much love for this post keep at it

Wow man thanks. i feel honored getting feed from you man. I will try my best to keep at it.

Cuz I'm kinda random. sometimes I write good, sometimes bad. haha. :sweating:

by **macdaddy019967** » Jan 11th, '10, 10:05

*gets oxygen tank*
nah for real though that was dope guta as usual i need to bring out my dictionary on this one though lmao

by **Yah-hah** » Jan 11th, '10, 10:44

Yeah man you dont force it man the vocab multis watever ya know. Good job bro

by **gutawafang** » Jan 12th, '10, 01:56

macdaddy019967 wrote:*gets oxygen tank*
nah for real though that was dope guta as usual i need to bring out my dictionary on this one though lmao

hahaha. Thanks for checking man. :y:

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah man you dont force it man the vocab multis watever ya know. Good job bro

Yeah, thanks a lot bro.

by **FAME** » Jan 12th, '10, 07:10

Your like a walking dictionary!

Short piece, but I still loved the vivid words choices that you always seem to have. It's your own style, and it works perfectly for you. Love your work like always, but some of the rhymes did seem a bit forced, but other than that great as always :y:

by **gutawafang** » Jan 12th, '10, 08:48

FAME wrote:Your like a walking dictionary!

Short piece, but I still loved the vivid words choices that you always seem to have. It's your own style, and it works perfectly for you. Love your work like always, but some of the rhymes did seem a bit forced, but other than that great as always

Thank you Fame. I appreciate the compliment. :flower:

by **KingDavid** » Jan 12th, '10, 19:47

Good words, but i think it's to intellegent for the average rap listener aha. nd id have 2 hear the last part vocally 2 see if it would flow with the rest . cool

by **gutawafang** » Jan 13th, '10, 03:12

KingDavid wrote:Good words, but i think it's to intellegent for the average rap listener aha. nd id have 2 hear the last part vocally 2 see if it would flow with the rest . cool

Thank you David.

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