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Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby SliK » Jan 8th, '10, 04:19

I know I said I'd try and drop something serious but I got too many of these to waste lol

See you cringe, I'm off the hinge, a broken gate bracket
ridin low pro, attractin hoes, call me a babe magnet
gettin brain so insane that she need a straight jacket
like a gay still in the closet, you're just a fake faggot
great actin like when Heath and Jake married
my songs are like cess, see, They leave you stress free
and hit you as intensely as the stuff that killed Pimp C
Lyrically enchanted, just call me Patrick Dempsey
Immensely underrated, that's about to change though
My style is pure and bubbly, I got that champagne flow
tryin to swallow your shit is like sippin Drano
I keep you entertained like watching a gameshow
plant a bullet in your chest, don't let the pain show
cos pain is a fertilizer, watch that blood stain grow
your crew's a pack of dogs, all i see is bitches
cut you with my punchlines and leave you all in stitches
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 04:30

some good punches :y:
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby SliK » Jan 8th, '10, 05:04

Cheers :b:
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby gutawafang » Jan 8th, '10, 05:07

This sounds very original to me. I mean, it's my first time seeing such a punchline.
Immensely underrated, that's about to change though
My style is pure and bubbly, I got that champagne flow
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 05:08

gutawafang wrote:This sounds very original to me. I mean, it's my first time seeing such a punchline.
Immensely underrated, that's about to change though
My style is pure and bubbly, I got that champagne flow


lol
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby Solace » Jan 8th, '10, 23:00

Thought that was pretty dope :y:
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Re: Punchline fun - 16 bars

Postby SliK » Jan 9th, '10, 14:45

Thanks for the feedback guys, when my life takes a turn for the worse I'll try and write some serious shit. For now you're stuck with punchlines :P
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