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i was bored and wrote a short verse..

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i was bored and wrote a short verse..

Postby iraqi4life » Jan 8th, '10, 20:25

As i, Start spittin to this beat
all i can think of is to beat
everyone in my sight like a deer
lookin for meat
to eat
so i suggest ya,ll step aside and acknowledge me
coz my lyrics are stronger than a tsunami
and my book of rhymes are larger than a toon-army
my metaphors are never ending like a revolution door
so if u dont want more


pause

how was this?
honestly...?
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Re: i was bored and wrote a short verse..

Postby Tomega » Jan 8th, '10, 20:28

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Re: i was bored and wrote a short verse..

Postby Wic Kid » Jan 8th, '10, 20:29

Dont ever get bored again.



Just kiddin lol. It was pretty bad IMO. The structure was terrible, plus your rhymes were wack. Just keep practisin and you should get better. :b:
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