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Postby classthe_king » Jan 11th, '10, 05:33

And the worst part is she gives me this sense of false hope
When I begin to wallow she's there to end the sorrow
It tends to follow in a pattern and it always fucks me up
She cares about me so much, she says she loves me what
Do you expect me to do, take all the shit you make me bear
This aching tear through my heart is causing blatant despair
As I take in hear every day im the best guy that you know
The rest lie to you so you just decided to guess I was to low
To express my true woes, but fuck it, I guess im not hot enough
So the pain bottled up inside will build up until the top erupts
You've got to trust no matter what I need you by my side
Because to be fully honest if you ever leave me I might die
I don't know why ive tried to get her, ive never got a kiss
The only guy she's comfortable by, who she ain't awkward with
I've got a lot to give but it doesn't matter, she doesn't see the facts
That this state you've put me in has my heart in a sea of black
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby classthe_king » Jan 11th, '10, 12:43

Fuck you guys :'(
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby gutawafang » Jan 12th, '10, 02:42

First and third man. :D

Read it twice. Just forgot to feed. :p
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby classthe_king » Jan 12th, '10, 03:52

Thanks Guta :flutter:
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby FAME » Jan 12th, '10, 07:14

I would have to agree with Guta, the first and third one seem to flow right together, while the second one seems a bit off in the flow. So I would go with the 1st and 3rd bro.
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby Edge » Jan 12th, '10, 08:46

nice drop man, id definently go with 1 and 3
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby classthe_king » Jan 13th, '10, 02:15

That's what I was thinking too, thanks guys :worship:
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby classthe_king » Jan 13th, '10, 03:10

Coleon wrote:1 & 3 are the most compatible as has been stated but if you want me to loop the beat for ya shoot it over :y:


Thanks, but im good, i think i only want 2 verses :flower:
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby Spyder » Jan 13th, '10, 04:20

1 and 3 no doubt
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Re: I Need Help!

Postby classthe_king » Jan 15th, '10, 19:48

iite, thanks spyder
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