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Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 12th, '10, 05:41

Yah-hah
I write evil lines count each wicked and one,
Equipped with the lungs like the clip of a gun,
Pull the trigger and I spit till the shit is all done,
Words tickle my tongue when like I'm lickin a blunt,
Cause anyone can get done whether a trick or a nun,
Pick these rapper off, easy as pickin a plum,
With graves as dirty as the dick of a bum,
Whipe your life off the map with the flick of my thumb,
Like herion I'm addicted to the kick of the drum,
Drinkin licorice rum until my liver is numb,
Writin 100 miles an hour watch this lunatic on the run,
With a razor in the space between my lip and my tongue,
You and me is like comparing a candle wick and a sun,
Whether I'm close to a million or a nickel to none,
I hold it down till my ticker is done,
I create fissures for fun and knock off the Richter at once,
I live in the depths like where the sinner is from,
Got ya heart in the oven like ya dinner is done,
Writing so sick wat you don't remember the one,
I'm the cat with the fiddle look how my riddle is sung.

Fa-Q
I go to the doctor, and say for the past year I've had peein pains,
Probably because, I stretch my nuts sack, until I start seein veins,
Goddamn, I have such an amazing hand,
yet when I'm yankin off it feels like raisin bran,
I get a fuckin erection, and try to bend my bone,
Fuckin a cunt, that said I was in the friend zone,
Cut her pussy off, then try and make a fold bigger,
Then the stomach on that bitch of a gold digger,
Hold a chigger, on the, hairs of my nut sack,
But that, makes it squishier than a sluts rack,
I want to butt fuck the sweaty cunt of a whore,
And treat it like Adrian tears up the Bears front four,
Twisting her titties, saying what bitch, you want more,
All I ask for, all I want is a morbibly obese, whore, with a leash,
Wearing all black, and get some whipping, four at least,
and ignore the piece, before she cease, to explore my neice,
I need a ten foot pole, to touch my 10 inch pole,
I need to stop getting aroused, when I pinch the hole


Yah-hah
I tear and scream at the heartless listener,
With my pen and my blood I paint the darkest picture,
With no more words like I tried to harvest winter,
And it's the darkest winter swimming upstream in the hardest river,
Until the shark fins enter these seas have never parted quicker,
They made me eat my words and I don't want part in this dinner,
Hopefully the hardest liqour can help me scarf it quicker,
Pardon the sinner when we march with liquor,
The darkest liquor makes me commit arson quicker,
I'm not the smartest offender when the darkness enters,
Sorry but the lights in my apartment flicker,
Sorry I shiver with arms full of sharpened splinters,
The sickest thoughts kill together though the artist differ,
Killing in such a violent way even the heartless consider,


Coleon
Rap's antagonist packin a fist for a masochist
on back again, and jammin' more than traffic is
the pacifist raps is always so savage with tracks an
talented, immaculate but never passive with action
the fathomless faction, 5 deep rappin' assasins
talons are slashin to put you fags in the trash bin
you can't even fathom half the data extracted
from chasms of talent I've amassed with a passion
packin' our axes to sling with wrath at you bastids
hack em and dash with a gang full of masked men
lynguistic'z is havoc to slit ya cap into fractions
a has been at clappin' straight cashin' his gats in
to get some cash for a matress after havin a stab with
battlin' me while I'm mad pissed, the black smith
craftin a bag of tricks out of sadness and mad spit
don't clash with a rabid jackal with cracked lips
from batterin ad libs with a nack to smash bricks
matter of fact bitch, I've dabbled with black sins
unravelin the fact that in fact I'm wraths twin
pass judgement on men with a gavel to smash kids
tackle their backs quick cuz life's path has a mad twist
but before that hitch I'll get half of you hacks lynched
Last edited by Yah-hah on Jan 12th, '10, 06:12, edited 1 time in total.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 12th, '10, 05:58

Lol Co. Foolishness
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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby gutawafang » Jan 12th, '10, 05:58

Yah-hah's verses had crazy multis. :o Hence, sick flow.

FaQ, your verse was like so random but hilarious. It's still good though. HAHAHA.

Coleon, sick vocab. Sick flow. :y:
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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 12th, '10, 06:01

Thanks Col, you a fool :laughing:
Yeah first verse was basically all one non-stop writing. Like think of another multi in the middle of my line.
Fa-Q-one one of the funniest from you. always make perverted jokes interesting lmao
My second was good, not like the first one though more of a complex piece
Coleon always comin with the syllable swordsman ill shit.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 12th, '10, 14:40

Thanks guta :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 12th, '10, 23:54

Thanks Guta...I love this collab guys
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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Just Silver » Jan 13th, '10, 00:31

Yah really great choice in words on this one seems like it could have went on forever

Fa-Q-Weird but somehow worked well within the collab
Raisin Bran lol i love Raisin Bran

Coleon- The multi flow was ridiculous and a very strong verse

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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 13th, '10, 00:55

Lol thanks Silv...and don't we all...the only thing better than raisin bran is...raisin bran with EXTRA raisins:)
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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 13th, '10, 01:02

Raisan bran with extra raisans =FUCKING DELICOUS!!!!
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Gravedancers: Deadly Scheme

Postby classthe_king » Jan 13th, '10, 02:39

Coleon easily had the best verse. Flow was insane, multis were insane too. Best thing from you since your comeback. Not quite on the Syllable-series though.

Yah-hah, I like the rhymeing throughout the whole verse, that's impressive but both times your verses got a little boring to me. No rhymes really stand out as WOW. I liked the second verse more.

Fa-q, ive seen you do better. Your just trying to be crazy and weird and it didn't work this time imo. Half the time your rhymes don't even rhyme and that hurts the flow of the verse. Same with yah, i got bored before i was even halfway through.
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