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a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 07:34

lift up the ax, to shatter my writers block
and if that dont work, im down to fire glocks
fuck with me and get more than a tire popped
the rum aint workin, so now i desire schnapps
my last shit was good, but i need flyer drops
until the siren stops, im down to expire cops
i fire shots, at anyone tryin to conspire plots
i light up entire blocks, with my dire shocks
iv seen dynasties fall, and watched empires rot
let the choir rock, cause im not done spittin
whip out my butterfly, just to have fun splittin
if u compete with me, all you've wons riddance
your family gets to mourning, like the suns risen
cause your done livin, i sent you six feet under
my words are lightening, i call the beat thunder
i speak wonders and i work all types of magic
everything i write with insight, ignites some habits
and usually the habits, cause downfalls and turmoil
it leaves people permanently sleepin under pure soil

feed is appreciated as usual
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Re: a verse

Postby gutawafang » Jan 14th, '10, 07:42

Sick multis man. :y:

Good drop imo. :)
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Re: a verse

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 07:49

I second Fish :)
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Re: a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 07:55

thanks guys, i couldnt think of shit all day lol i even tried writing to a beat which i dont usually do... than i turned the beat off and i came up with this lol
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Re: a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 09:18

bump
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Re: a verse

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 14th, '10, 09:29

And also Edge...I like how you're fighting your writers block in this...dope concept.
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Re: a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 09:40

Fa-Q wrote:And also Edge...I like how you're fighting your writers block in this...dope concept.


thanks man, i didnt think anyone would notice that :y:
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Re: a verse

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 14th, '10, 16:55

Amadeo is still alive!!!! :o

Yeah bro I dig the concept man multis are good too. I pretty much consider you not the new guy any more so congrats on that :b:
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Re: a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 17:36

Amadeo wrote:that was impressive. i really liked your metaphors & wordplay as well as your rhymes.

my favorite line: "your family get to mourning like the sun's risen."

as well as the opening metaphor about shattering the writer's block with an axe.

i think this piece needs some more credit.


thaks man, i really appreciate that :D
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Re: a verse

Postby Edge » Jan 14th, '10, 17:39

Yah-hah wrote:Amadeo is still alive!!!! :o

Yeah bro I dig the concept man multis are good too. I pretty much consider you not the new guy any more so congrats on that :b:


:o

thank you, i still got a lot to learn though when it comes to writing lol i must say this site has helped me soooo much
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Re: a verse

Postby Element. » Jan 15th, '10, 00:00

nice man :y: :y: :worship:
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