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"Released" 1st Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 15th, '10, 04:41

I Bestow her, though she makes me suffer, but ain't going nowhere,
Trapped in your dazing stare, when I'm simply blazing there,
She making me stay-in-here, later i know we'll be playing dare,
Her laying bare, and just me paying care, in my kinky sexing lair,
Not the romantic type, but I want her to back up the acrobatic hype,
She's been putting on her sexing skills, hoping she's fresh and ripe,
Nervous so I'm popping prescription pills, shakin' so a million spills,
Leave them in the kitchen for refills later, get in my room and get chills,
This woman makes my skin peel, but I grin still, cause excitin' thrills,
Happen when we ridin' for real, anyways by this time I'm seekin' for kills,
But, I can't leave her amazin' presence, since, I used to take blazin' lessons,
It's a radical change, she's a beautiful magical mage, no more anti-depressants,
She's my new, healthy addiction, and fortunately there's no conviction to it,
Now, when I spit, I no longer slit my arm at the same time, my road is finally lit,

Yes it kind of is a love song.... i made it for my gf and she loved it :wub:
so i thought it was good enough to be posted here :D
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Re: "Released" 1st Verse

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 15th, '10, 06:47

I did stop and go flow on this and it was perfect...I loved this piece. The multies are perfectly placed and wow...I'm really astounded....you stepped your game on this one...keep it up
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Re: "Released" 1st Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 15th, '10, 18:45

Fa-Q wrote:I did stop and go flow on this and it was perfect...I loved this piece. The multies are perfectly placed and wow...I'm really astounded....you stepped your game on this one...keep it up

thanks i put SO much work on to this piece and to hear that kind of feedback makes me think it was worth my time.. thanks :y:
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Re: "Released" 1st Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 15th, '10, 20:13

No one likes me :'(
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Re: "Released" 1st Verse

Postby 2sDay » Jan 16th, '10, 03:06

bump!!!!!
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