Okay just curious if i should even keep this verse it took me like 5 mins. to write and idk about it
Complicated lyrics for obligated minds, overmystic lies, defined by christ-guys,
Pastors of sorts, opoun notes they found high, Trippin' off "spirit", or diferent blind-sides,
visit the otherside, were defined by black-pride, not as in a race, not as in a flag,
no MLK, no rights, no crack, no docter, no lawer, no judge, or no cops,
there is no failure, within these dark docks, we come in as a flock, or herd if you will,
with a skill in red-dot kill, and oding pills, the suicide gang of misfits, hard targets,
fast as a lark is, yet still as a carcus, (so heartless) we go further and beyond,
this world that you see, cuzz within is all is a faction, the world versus me
Like I said I'm kinda up in the air on this one so thanks
Me versus everyone
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Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:14
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:22
Coleon wrote:Lyrical Threatz?
whats that...
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:29
Coleon wrote:never mindjust a guy there named Mos Hated and I was wondering if you was him
Nah...feed? ill feed you, if you feed me. Feel me?
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:37
Coleon wrote:Most-Hated wrote:Coleon wrote:never mind
Nah...feed? ill feed you, if you feed me. Feel me?
No homo? I don't need feed but
the beginning was full of prolix it seemed and was quite pseudo intelligent but no harm no foul, who doesn't do that
you have long lines which make the flow hard
the concept was there, you expressed it better in the latter part
overall it's pretty good for how short it was
lol thank you but I seriously LOLed when I read the phrase Pseudo Intelligent... I'm seriously gonna use that in a rhyme one day or an argument. hahaha
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:46
Coleon wrote:No doubt homie
what other sites you been to? I take it you've been writing for a bit
None this is my first website... Ive been writing for years... I also record...
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 04:53
Coleon wrote:Most-Hated wrote:Coleon wrote:No doubt homie
what other sites you been to? I take it you've been writing for a bit
None this is my first website... Ive been writing for years... I also record...
mind PM'in me some audio, always interested in the new guys
well welcome and stay activeTR can be heaven or TR can be hell
K, Pm'd you... Thanks guy, looks like a wonderful neighborhood you got here
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Fa-Q » Jan 20th, '10, 05:02
Pretty good man...welcome btw...but sometimes there's a point where you can go overboard on the vocab....good drop tho
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 05:05
Fa-Q wrote:Pretty good man...welcome btw...but sometimes there's a point where you can go overboard on the vocab....good drop tho
Yeah I meant to do that actually. I was experimenting with different words and rhyme-schemes but I'm glad you pointed that out because it does have excess wordage if you will..
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Yah-hah » Jan 20th, '10, 05:22
Yeah man I dig it. The vocab was cool, I really like the first few lines too 
"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah
Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol
Nundea Mekeze comin soon May 4th
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Fa-Q » Jan 20th, '10, 05:44
Most-Hated wrote:Fa-Q wrote:Pretty good man...welcome btw...but sometimes there's a point where you can go overboard on the vocab....good drop tho
Yeah I meant to do that actually. I was experimenting with different words and rhyme-schemes but I'm glad you pointed that out because it does have excess wordage if you will..
Hahaha ok yea sometimes its fun just to fuck a song lyrically...good luck man good to know TRs got another good writer
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Re: Me versus everyone
by Most-Hated » Jan 20th, '10, 05:45
Fa-Q wrote:Most-Hated wrote:Fa-Q wrote:Pretty good man...welcome btw...but sometimes there's a point where you can go overboard on the vocab....good drop tho
Yeah I meant to do that actually. I was experimenting with different words and rhyme-schemes but I'm glad you pointed that out because it does have excess wordage if you will..
Hahaha ok yea sometimes its fun just to fuck a song lyrically...good luck man good to know TRs got another good writer
thanks man
she takes me on a journey, to a place called hell,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
she showed where she stays, she show me where she dwells,
theres an errie saddness, commin from the room,
its as if its a funeral, but were all doomed,
death all around, but i feel more comfort,
blood rained skies, you could say im covered,
the feelin from her, is like no other
dont wanna say it, but the demon i love her,
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Re: Me versus everyone
by ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 20th, '10, 17:42
Coleon wrote:it's aight we got a few fags thoughpeace
you hating on my style. gays need love to
nice peice man, post da audio!
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