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16 lines of venom

Postby Edge » Jan 27th, '10, 01:03

before i get yelled at because of the structure, just know i wasnt caring about that because im working on my flows, and it flowed nice like this... feed appreciated

My punches leave you mumbling like a wordy sentence
My drugs leave you tripping like a nerdy entrance
My raps leave you screaming ‘Holy Shit’ like a dirty penance
My rocket brings the high heat like a mid-thirtys Clemens
But in my raps, you will never find any steroid use
Im always down to get to beefing, I always avoid truce
I deploy troops, cause me im the leader, I’m the Captain
Troops from Staten, get to clappin if u let shit happen
And when I get to rappin, my flows smooth as satin
Verbally attackin, any rat and all his men, when theyr flappin
Their gums, talkin shit, they fall into a trap and, wont make it
I get my shots in like when a foul is flagrant
Im a wondering vagrant, lost without a purpose
But im not worthless, I’m brilliantly worth it
So if you give me a chance Imma blow up like a bomb
Until than, I’m just hanging, sortta like Sadam

Line 4/5- Roger clemens nickname was the Rocket and he used to pitch fast, he used streroids
Last line- Sadam Hussain was hung to be killed
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Good For Nothing » Jan 27th, '10, 01:12

that sadam line was genius and great multi's :worship:
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Spyder » Jan 27th, '10, 01:37

sadam line was ight :unsure:

but i like this peice man, your getting better every drop
punches and wordplay is pretty good

nice drop
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby AOBrien09 » Jan 27th, '10, 01:52

multi's are nice and you got good vocab from looks of it, flow was on point a thought aswell, nice stuff man :y: (heard saddam line used that way a few times :sweating: )
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 27th, '10, 05:06

Yeah man shit was dope for real. Get pretty nasty :y:
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Arrinef » Jan 27th, '10, 05:25

damn, that shit was intense

straight fire man

props :y:
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Edge » Jan 27th, '10, 06:50

thank you everyone :worship: i appreciate it
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Edge » Jan 27th, '10, 06:55

ArrineF wrote:damn, that shit was intense

straight fire man

props :y:


u need to post writtens my man, i enjoyed reading ya drops
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby gutawafang » Jan 27th, '10, 07:00

Fucker, those are sick multis man! :o

Few nice punches there. :y: :y: :y:

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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Edge » Jan 27th, '10, 07:15

gutawafang wrote:Fucker, those are sick multis man! :o

Few nice punches there. :y: :y: :y:

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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Element. » Jan 27th, '10, 19:19

Dude your getting better and better :y:
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Re: 16 lines of venom

Postby Edge » Jan 28th, '10, 22:36

bump :whistle:
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