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Postby strangerthenfiction » Jan 29th, '10, 14:32

hey tr just messin wit this shit below so tell me how idid
thankss :y: oan btw ijust threwthechorus in for kicks not the legit one when i record

most of u know that im better then most
your all about to be toast
swtich your names to casper ciz ir nout to be ghosts
an im about to be gold in about one second
ciz im bout to explode an expose tha rap game, with my aim to stay neked
but im a motherfucker im crazy my aims reckless
cashin in every paycheck to pay for the damn necklace
had to take out a lease but at least it gets me on guestlists
hot artists or not im on thee offensive
never been off better call it onfensive
cuz honestly im just here to spit ma belifs
grit my teeth an try to believe that i will mek it
so mic check 1 2 yo lets get it in
let the chorus supoort us of course i am a win


so look hoos gone grindin
look hoos gone grimdin
look hoos gone grinimd ay
fat cash stacks that can flip a bitches weave back
playin wit tht kinda money today


this is stf givin u stds a-i-d h-i-v u get the picture
better call the dr swifty urtimes tickin
while i blast thru every one of your lines with such vivor
simply, becuz ima be da victor
get dropped into the east river
drownin under miles of water tied to piles of rocks
an if you hold your breath ur dead a slaughter at low cost
whether u like it or not this guns hot
meaning it might go off at any second in any direction
ciz like i said be4 me an ma aims wreckleess
and sprays from everywhere
so everywhere an everyday you stay defenless
stranger then fiction a vicious,conflicted menace

so look hoos gone grindin
look hoos gone grimdin
look hoos gone grinimd ay
fat cash stacks that can flip a bitches weave back
playin wit tht kinda money today
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Re: STF

Postby AOBrien09 » Jan 29th, '10, 17:07

could do with a few more multies in places seemed quite basic, also if instead off writing things like tht, becuz etc; try writing the actual word like that and because, cause it would make it much easier to read and less of a mess.
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