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Fuck This

Postby gutawafang » Feb 19th, '10, 02:13

I cannot see myself anymore
Vision filtered by cascading tears
I cannot head towards any direction
I’ve been eaten by this constant fear

I can no longer smile genuinely
Heartbroken, shattered and smashed
I’m fixing by piecing everything back
But it’s been ripped, cut and slashed

I cannot see anything anymore
Blinded by the beauty of lights lit
I’m still alive and fucking suffocating
I can feel, but can’t see my wrists slit

Why am I still breathing?
Questions fill the mind, overflowing
I’m drowning even though I’m a Fish
Where the fuck am I going?
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Re: Fuck This

Postby Ticalrecords » Feb 19th, '10, 02:38

im feelin it, u shud go more in depth with each feeling of hopelessness and not being able to smile n wut not. i like the "cascading tears" line - good vocab hha
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Re: Fuck This

Postby gutawafang » Feb 19th, '10, 02:41

Ticalrecords wrote:im feelin it, u shud go more in depth with each feeling of hopelessness and not being able to smile n wut not. i like the "cascading tears" line - good vocab hha

Thank you so much man. :happy:
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Re: Fuck This

Postby macdaddy019967 » Feb 19th, '10, 06:29

I’m still alive and fucking suffocating
I can feel, but can’t see my wrists slit

that right there is fucking dope
keep writing Guta i always enjoy reading your stuff when i have time :y:
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Re: Fuck This

Postby gutawafang » Feb 19th, '10, 08:04

macdaddy019967 wrote:
I’m still alive and fucking suffocating
I can feel, but can’t see my wrists slit

that right there is fucking dope
keep writing Guta i always enjoy reading your stuff when i have time :y:

Thanks. :worship:
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Re: Fuck This

Postby lilrossy » Feb 19th, '10, 23:36

that was really good man, sum deep shit. liked the different rhyme scheme you did, worked good. nice flow too. keep it up man. :y:
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Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Fuck This

Postby gutawafang » Feb 21st, '10, 13:03

lilrossy wrote:that was really good man, sum deep shit. liked the different rhyme scheme you did, worked good. nice flow too. keep it up man. :y:

arigato. :)
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