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Weigh Me Down

Postby Tash8 » Mar 2nd, '10, 06:29

we're born and raised with more than brains
give yourself time to grow them strengths
don't show restraint till we old n gray
cause the only thing stopping you is you
don't think you can't, just think you'll do
and see the difference is
you hope you win, I know I will
a poker game, (its all or nill)
you hold the cards, so show us skill
a chance like this doesn't happen much
go full speed but fasten up
never let emotions weigh you down
use your sense what you say does sound
confidence in not what you say but what you do
and that sum it up in a nutshell or two
but after all it matters most
can't think straight, think adderall and I'll
I'll be here

[chorus x2]
I'll be here don't weigh me down
I've finally found this solid ground
and now it sounds, I have it good but
you gotta understand these things it took

and again I'll say what I said before
to reach the top, you can't dread the fall
i'm the best in the west so rest assured
I'm the elliot ness, the "Untouchable"
it's what i like to believe, so fuck you all
and under all this city of shit
i found oasis, (a wonderwall)
and if idiots get, closed to it
thunder draws

I haven't finished the second verse...i recorded the first and the hook, will post when i finish the song in audio stage.
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Re: Weigh Me Down

Postby Fa-Q » Mar 2nd, '10, 08:41

The only thing lacking is the vocab, everything else is good...including message :y: ....good drop Tash
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Re: Weigh Me Down

Postby Tash8 » Mar 2nd, '10, 16:48

Fa-Q wrote:The only thing lacking is the vocab, everything else is good...including message :y: ....good drop Tash


thx i agree with you about the vocab...when i rap this it's really fast flow and i could never use any "big" words, idk why but thx bro
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Re: Weigh Me Down

Postby Yah-hah » Mar 2nd, '10, 18:09

Yeah man I'm the same way I never really use big words, I just try to use diverse words, like not repeat myself. But really good, I always dig your stuff, nice flow now that I've heard your audio it's easier to get the flow. RAIDERS FOR LIFE!! lol
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Re: Weigh Me Down

Postby Tash8 » Mar 2nd, '10, 19:10

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah man I'm the same way I never really use big words, I just try to use diverse words, like not repeat myself. But really good, I always dig your stuff, nice flow now that I've heard your audio it's easier to get the flow. RAIDERS FOR LIFE!! lol


thx man
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