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Over It

Postby Solace » Mar 22nd, '10, 22:22

[Chorus x2: Sum 41]
Address this letter to dear father,
I know you as complete unknown,
I guess it's better, you don't bother,
All our truths should be left alone.

[Verse]
You wouldn't know but I was never one for keepin' grudges,
But a situation like this needs more than weak discussion,
Be the man you never were and deal with repercussions,
My mom? I think you never deserved to be her husband,
Then you leave her nothin'; you don't deserve a mention 'bout,
Your actions invented doubt, think of you and tend to shout,
Fifteen years and no attention sprouts, so I vent this loud,
Drunk again? No wonder you st-studder in your sentence now,
Your bullshit as a little kid I would just buy it in,
As you would always hit the supermarket to buy ya Heineken,
At the age of seven you left us, it's messed up, a true tragedy,
Everything was falling apart, so you went to a new family?
Well I hear you got two sons and a daughter? Why bother?
You couldn't even support me and my sis, you weren't a father,
For now I'll just be honest, I want you to be fucking cautious,
Don't let the past repeat, get the thought; just fucking block it,
But what's done is done, I would always cry you knew it,
What pried you through this, I would wonder why you'd do it,
Became quite abusive, miss the days we'd play ball in the grass,
Crazed it changed, but now at least that's all in the past,

[Chorus Sample x2: Sum 41]
Address this letter to dear father,
I know you as complete unknown,
I guess it's better, you don't bother,
All our truths should be left alone.
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Re: Over It

Postby classthe_king » Mar 22nd, '10, 22:31

Wow, this had me tearing up :'(
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Over It

Postby Solace » Mar 22nd, '10, 23:08

If that was a positive comment, then thank you. :sweating:
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Re: Over It

Postby classthe_king » Mar 22nd, '10, 23:15

Solace wrote:If that was a positive comment, then thank you. :sweating:


It was :y:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Over It

Postby dR3 » Mar 22nd, '10, 23:16

Is this actually real? :(

Anyway I like this drop, really nice storytelling.
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Re: Over It

Postby DƎRDYPK » Mar 22nd, '10, 23:19

that was mad dope bro :worship:
a very very deep side :zipped:
I loved it :wub:
you took it way beyond a 16 ;)
keep up the work :y:

one question though.....

What Sum 41 song is that? chances are I haven't heard it....
all I remember is some of the songs on All Killer No Filler
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Re: Over It

Postby Solace » Mar 22nd, '10, 23:28

classthe_king wrote:
Solace wrote:If that was a positive comment, then thank you. :sweating:


It was :y:

Then thank you. :smoking:

dR.dR3 wrote:Is this actually real? :(

Anyway I like this drop, really nice storytelling.

Yes it is, but this is merely a gist. I went through it imo more detailed a long time ago in pieces called Dear Dad and Dear Dad Pt. II I believe. If you care to read, go ahead lol.

Thanks for checking.

DerdyPK wrote:that was mad dope bro :worship:
a very very deep side :zipped:
I loved it :wub:
you took it way beyond a 16 ;)
keep up the work :y:

one question though.....

What Sum 41 song is that? chances are I haven't heard it....
all I remember is some of the songs on All Killer No Filler

Thanks bro. And the song is called "Dear Father" on their 2007 (I think) album Underclass Hero and All Killer No Filler was like in 2000 so yeah no wonder you dont know it lmao.

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a very Same Story feel to it and plus you have real experience backing it up, :y: great job Sol

Can't believe you think it's my best, but appreciate the feed of course. Glad you enjoyed.
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Re: Over It

Postby dR3 » Mar 23rd, '10, 13:45

Is it in the CW?
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Re: Over It

Postby Solace » Mar 23rd, '10, 22:43

Yeah. Fuck it; here if you wanna see.

Walks in from fucking work, I'm excited but to him I am nothing worth,
I am but a stuck up twerp, how much it hurts from that fuckin' jerk,
Wasn't sure, of it at the time, but I figured he hit the bottle half to nine,
When I was five, so I would ask him why was he acting psyched,
Used to want to be just like him, til I heard the screams and all the fighting,
Beating, screaming at my mother, then he'd be calling his wife "Bitch"...
I wish to tear through this fat bitch addict with an automatic,
Fuck this madness, doesn't care that he fucking caused this sadness,
Wish he would've just stomped this habit, I'm sick in the stomach,
Keep smoking, I'll make sure at least one thing rips in your lung bitch,
I hate you, you're a liar, despicable, how I hate ever trusting you,
Fuck it's true, here I'll give you a stick, you know where to shove it to,
Never had no love in you, this passionate hate burns his memory,
As a child he was always vexing me, now he will forever be an enemy,
You couldn't ever do shit for me, disabled dad, a handicapped?
I'm a little fucked up in the brain, well I guess it runs in the family, dad.



[Verse]
So many times I've been fucked over and I hate it,
Wish you would just die but I don't ever say shit,
You're just a pig that never pays child support,
Pretended to have late shifts, always filing reports,
While you lied and went to fuck some cheap bitches,
Someday you'll be on the ground, and you'll need stitches,
I take that framed picture of you and then I smash it,
Open up the cupboard, then I break all of the glasses,
Feel my knuckles bleeding, all you hearing is a thud,
I'm a little psychotic, well I fear it's in my blood,
I've always hated you, love? Well I never got it,
Never received it, nope never got it from my father,
When mom had cancer, you didn't give a fuck,
Pointless being, off yourself and just give it up,
And one day I might turn out to be worthless,
I'll follow in your footsteps, haha yeah you heard it.

[Hook]
Can't wait for your funeral, I won't be there,
If I did, I'd spit on your casket, nobody cares,
Just a piece of trash, I would place shit above you,
One last thing to say: Oh I never loved you.
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