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X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 3rd, '10, 05:34

J 'Roc', claims he's always going 'light' on his puny verse,
Like a 'gamma ray', I'll expose you to the whole universe,
Diss me and your bound to get, popped and found 'split',
Like your heart when peers say you won't amount to shit,
Your shit doesn't amaze me, like Kingdom Come by Jay-Z,
The only kingdom that 'cums' at you is the one of gays B,
Let's do some math 1,2,3, you J Roc equal as half of me,
Roc sixteen scared of me, X fourteen he laughs at beef,
It seems your life is done, you got nowhere to hide or run,
So light a blunt, while I just watch you slowly die for fun,
Long goosebumps aren't rare, cause to you I slurred gay,
Blame me if your parents tell you 'I heard a little bird say',
Fuck your fancy shit, to diss you don't need no wordplay,
Well, not me cause you cry soon as you heard my name,
Also, fuck you Spy-girl, get the fuck out of my world,
Get 1 bar cause your looks made me and this guy hurl,

Spyder: couldn't find it but i saw it somewhere :angry:

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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Spyder » Apr 3rd, '10, 06:09

on an honest note didnt think it clever. lot of weak punches, your had no personals which means a diss gotta be all about the punches in which this lacked.

not sure what that hobo is doing, but that was the best part of the drop


but keep at it man, concentrate on harder punches if your not using personals :y:
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 04:42

Lol that was weak as fuck.
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 10th, '10, 04:47

Solace wrote:Lol that was weak as fuck.

.....you had to read the bad one didn't you :coffee:

I have new one and say it's weak as fuck :whistle:
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 04:49

Yeah I read that too.

It's pretty gay.

I recall, you told Spyder to "eat his fat tit"?
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 10th, '10, 04:51

Solace wrote:Yeah I read that too.

It's pretty gay.

I recall, you told Spyder to "eat his fat tit"?

You would've enjoyed it more if i said fat dick? :confusion:
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Spyder » Apr 10th, '10, 04:56

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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 04:57

No, but what kind of wack lines are you trying to push as "not weak as fuck". You rhymed fat shit with fat tit, what proves that you're a good rhymer here? And you tell another guy to eat his tit, as a diss...I can't see why you think that piece wasn't "weak as fuck". Along with lines like calling someone a "gay wack". You have the simplest rhymes ever. And most of it was just ripping off lines anyways...How hard could it be?
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 10th, '10, 05:01

Solace wrote:No, but what kind of wack lines are you trying to push as "not weak as fuck". You rhymed fat shit with fat tit, what proves that you're a good rhymer here? And you tell another guy to eat his tit, as a diss...I can't see why you think that piece wasn't "weak as fuck". Along with lines like calling someone a "gay wack". You have the simplest rhymes ever. And most of it was just ripping off lines anyways...How hard could it be?

I never said it wasn't a wack line. And you need to chill, getting worked up over this shit. Slow the fuck down. And I was doing a re-make of Hail Mary so yes I have to use the same rhymes. I was inspired by hearing both 2Pac's and Eminem's version so I made it into a diss, is that so bad? And what proves that I'm a good rhymer are other pieces of mine plus Hail Mary wasn't bad at all as you can see by the feed so stop getting your panties up in a bunch, stop hating, and read my sig. :coffee:
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 05:04

You act as though me typing up like 5 sentences on a internet forum explaining how you suck at disses is me getting worked up. 30 seconds is something I can waste. :y:

And by the feed? I don't care what the feed says..I'm giving you MY feed. Don't get angered if everyone doesn't like your little diss. And yeah, I'm judging the diss itself...Not by "your other pieces". That's like Eminem putting out Fack as a diss to Bone Thugs N Harmony but then someone defending him saying "well listen to his other tracks therefore its alll goooood."

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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 10th, '10, 05:06

Solace wrote:You act as though me typing up like 5 sentences on a internet forum explaining how you suck at disses is me getting worked up. 30 seconds is something I can waste. :y:

It was 7 sentences and your just getting butthurt cause I dissed your lovers. Just like Fa-Q predicted :facepalm
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Spyder » Apr 10th, '10, 05:08

oh Fa-Q been sayin stuff huh :coffee:
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 05:08

*Read my edit buddy.

And 7 sentences...Lol...You counted. :facepalm

Butthurt? Dude, if you can't take an honest opinion why are you even here? You're supposed to post to get feedback, I personally think you suck at disses, we can't leave it at that?
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby X'ed Up » Apr 10th, '10, 05:10

Solace wrote:*Read my edit buddy.

And 7 sentences...Lol...You counted. :facepalm

Butthurt? Dude, if you can't take an honest opinion why are you even here? You're supposed to post to get feedback, I personally think you suck at disses, we can't leave it at that?

Let's leave it at that. But I'm gonna stop this shit. Shoulda listened to Fa-Q :facepalm
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Re: X-Day(Diss)...Alone

Postby Solace » Apr 10th, '10, 05:11

Gunna stop it?

Oh lmao now you can't handle the heat. :coffee:
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