Punchlines & Friends

[X'ed Up]

Tryna step up my punchlines, wordplay game. So a random-ass verse is here for all of you.

X'ed Up, the most 'dopest' thing since white crack,
I'll 'smoke' whiteys so bad I'll leave em light black,
You couldn't make crowds scream for your lives,
Not if your punk-ass gives the crowd free knives,
I once mailed an ear to a girl like Mr. Van Gogh,
Read "Bitch, I'll kill yo' freak, without a damn blow",
A month later I got a response from planet 'Mary',
Said she was a 'virgin' and says it ain't sanitary,
A week later I mailed her poor Barry's sliced wrist,
Letter read "next the man will not be able to piss",
Next thing I know Mary's at my door with a shotty,
Shoots me twice and sees Barry taking a lil potty,
The bitch opens the door and she just sees a boddy,
No arms, legs or dick just a fatass there rotting,

Kinda got carried away with storytelling and horrorcore a bit in the end. But it was good practice.

[X'ed Up]

The first bar was a horrible punch, and jabbed at white people for no apparent reason.

The ear mailing line was too similar to an Em line.

The "horrorcore" was definitely not horrorcore. Unless you were shooting for the childish gum wrapper gore Em uses.

The rhymes were good but not complex, that's about all.

Anyways thanks for checking out

[DƎRDYPK]

Word to Cole

bring something different homie

[hype]

that was horrible.

[X'ed Up]

That was for the line attacking Eminem. Not for the feed.

I said thanks cuz i appreciate your feed

[X'ed Up]

That was for the line attacking Eminem. Not for the feed.

I said thanks cuz i appreciate your feed

Cage
Necro
Ill Bill
Rhyme Asylum
Canibus
DZK
Big Pun

These people have done real horror core, not my fault Em can't.

This debate doesn't belong here....we'll debate it somewhere else but anyways thanks for the feed