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simple shit

Postby Enimee » Jul 3rd, '10, 11:00

I RAP HOT
thats a fact dont ask me not
I CANT STOP
i just go off the top with the flow like


Get at me- im on point like a ball point yall joined the wrong forces
stall...point gun insert clip to yall joints, and hit wit some star wars shit
jedi mind trickin these hoes wit a punch line to topple your best bars
cause im more, and- a- kin to spit darth vader flow flyer the the death star
check dog dont care if you dont up my post used to gettin ignored
fuck i even need these west indie, nigerian, alabama ass opinions for
i mean your credibility aint in tact cause to me you really dont exist
so ima keep on droppin hot shit just for practice like ohhh shit
no this,
muther fucker didnt, im ignorin the rules for this text forum spittin
im next your finished, leave at that get your neck and spine twisted
in-a figure 8 formation im straight your gay and why do yall all keep playin
187, everybody gettin it, this aint directly aimed im just rippin it
360 thousands times, the degree of my flow can not be defined or found above the kelvin line
absolute, zero, absolute nothin ive succumed to budweiser poundin and absolute chuggin
im buggin losin my mind, lost it wants then stole the golden compass and used it to find
the shatter peices of my cranium scatter all over the globe and now im back
stickin um all up in your assholes, you assholes, start recognizin me
IM TR'S GREATES PRODIGY diabolicly enterin into my spectrum
ill do like obama and disconnect um
from my broadband band network fuck any structure cause yall couldnt handle this
if i made it picture perfect my shitd be worthless and if you heard me spit youd be like
this kids the purpose whole reason behind why i be teachin these rhymes
to fourth graders in the parkin lot with a beaker of wine.


im done now
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Re: simple shit

Postby Solace » Jul 3rd, '10, 17:08

Beginning you had your structure well and then it became all messy so I can't really judge. The Star Wars punches were nice, I liked the Anakin nameplay. :y:
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Re: simple shit

Postby Enimee » Jul 3rd, '10, 18:04

word preciate it, lol i was keystylin so i jus went nuts really didnt focus on nothin jus kept typin :P
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Re: simple shit

Postby Enimee » Jan 23rd, '11, 03:45

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