Redzek - All For Nothing

[Le Tunisien]

(link of feedback: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=101486&start=0)


emo track, say soft if you want lol...oh and about them two lines "i found the fountain of the youth" and the "ill always have your back" ideas i liked it so i just kinda put it...just check it
thanks

download:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/825034397bc2486b/

(verse 1)

im just confused right now,i dunno what to say
askin what?why?how?could you ever leave away
i should not cry now,you aint even worth a tear
i was there,i was here..when you needed me dear
now im bleedin the fear,that i had for you!steal
my heart then runaway,with it and i aint livin
with this,shit is sad,this game im believin
is insane!its deceivin when you love somebody too much
you'd do anything for him in anyday and for him your just
..a name,with a body,no feelings..
its real and,their love is like a demon
when you believe its there,in dreams and nightmares
this shit aint quite fair,your beloved doesnt care
your nothin he cant see you,he treats you like the air
i'm aware that i scream in my chair i love you i swear
but what hurts me the most is: i was not prepared!!

(hook)

cuz theres nothin to explain
your pain did pour just like the rain
its insane i loved you in vain
my love for you would never change
it remains the same,please say my name
i love you now is all im sayin
and i dont want to get you hurt
cuz all i want is to be heard

(verse 2)

lately i feel trapped,please wont you take me back
its wack,its crazy how baby you made me a act !!!
like a maniac,i know we'r nutz,thats a fact
its just that i clap,everytime i get stabbed
from the back,its okay i wll always have ur back
our love is forever intact,im too clever,you rats
push me to bomb on you kats like i really am 2pac
y'all know im doin good,the rest of you are doin bad
im testin you then i'll attack,what i just do is not a rap
its a truth and a proof,i found the fountain of the youth
now ill do the impossible,like seein mountains out of roofs
y'all can sue me,start countin all my dudes
how many times i been cruel,and made you feel so jealous
i worry about who love me cuz haters remain haters
they state us,they cant fake us,cant change how god made us
this craze is not strange as the hate ,they cant fade us!

(hook)
cuz theres nothin to explain
your pain did pour just like the rain
its insane i loved you in vain
my love for you would never change
it remains the same,please say my name
i love you now is all im sayin
and i dont want to get you hurt
cuz all i want is to be heard

(hook x2)

cuz theres nothin to explain
your pain did pour just like the rain
its insane i loved you in vain
my love for you would never change
it remains the same,please say my name
i love you now is all im sayin
and i dont want to get you hurt
cuz all i want is to be heard

[gutawafang]

Delivery sucks for this one bro. I mean, comparing to your other works.

Chorus is always the same to me man. It's always monotonous and shit. But I like the topic man. Lyrics wise, pretty good.

[B.A.D.]

damn man, I like the emotion but you lack delivery. I still hate your microphone so go fucking buy one thats good!!!!! and I will keep telling you this until you buy one

the flow is good man, I like that u know how to keep it flowing all the way throughout the verses.

the lyrics are good aswell... only thing you need to fix is the overall delivery and the hook man, it sounds too damn bassy... try to use diferent settings and when you mix try to understand what youre doing so you improve the quality at least a little bit

BUY A MICROPHONE DAMN IT!!

[Wallace]

I'll check it

EDIT:
Overall it was not outstandin'. The chorus sounds too simple. Second verse was a little better cuz I felt you tried to get out from easy lyrics. The work itself was too amateur.

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