The Little Things

[Wreck]

Link of Feed- http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic. ... 7#p1487167

Old song, listen with this in mind- old flow, was the time period when I first started recording, and on a ok mic, not a studio mic.

http://usershare.net/f9j3jsfh6sk0

[Scrubz]

When Some one says listen in mind.... I m usually in for a rough song lol. You got potential, il give you that but I saw many flaws. I'm gonna be a little hard but it's for your own good. Also I understand this is old but I'm going to judge as if it was fresh out the kithen!

Flow- hmmm there really was none. At times you hit it nicely, but mostly it was shaky, rocky, and all over the place.
Lyrics- not bad, but not great either. Nothin clever or eye popin but nothing retarded either.
Rhyme scheeme- very basic, keep adding multi's and it will improve you as an mc
Delivery and voice- I think you need to work on this, it was like you were tryingto hard to capture emotion but you just sounded kinda wimpy tbh. I see potential tho.
Recording and mixing- not very good. Your vocals soured way to loud, too close to the mic and the overall quality was bad. Need to try and layer yu vocals, pan some of them and add some backing to them.
Chorus- my favorite part of the song, not a good thing considering I'm guessing it wasn't you lol.

Overall- there's many flaws, luckily they can all be fixed. Befor every song you should remember the things you need to work on and strive to improve it on every level. You got talent and passion so keep it up bro, keep Putin out tracks and don't get discouraged. We've all been here, every mc. I really wanna hear you new shot man, il hook u up with a beat and possibly colab on it. Pm me for details

Also please feed me as I did to you! viewtopic.php?f=38&t=105991

[Wreck]

When Some one says listen in mind.... I m usually in for a rough song lol. You got potential, il give you that but I saw many flaws. I'm gonna be a little hard but it's for your own good. Also I understand this is old but I'm going to judge as if it was fresh out the kithen!

Flow- hmmm there really was none. At times you hit it nicely, but mostly it was shaky, rocky, and all over the place.
Lyrics- not bad, but not great either. Nothin clever or eye popin but nothing retarded either.
Rhyme scheeme- very basic, keep adding multi's and it will improve you as an mc
Delivery and voice- I think you need to work on this, it was like you were tryingto hard to capture emotion but you just sounded kinda wimpy tbh. I see potential tho.
Recording and mixing- not very good. Your vocals soured way to loud, too close to the mic and the overall quality was bad. Need to try and layer yu vocals, pan some of them and add some backing to them.
Chorus- my favorite part of the song, not a good thing considering I'm guessing it wasn't you lol.

Overall- there's many flaws, luckily they can all be fixed. Befor every song you should remember the things you need to work on and strive to improve it on every level. You got talent and passion so keep it up bro, keep Putin out tracks and don't get discouraged. We've all been here, every mc. I really wanna hear you new shot man, il hook u up with a beat and possibly colab on it. Pm me for details

Also please feed me as I did to you! http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic. ... 8&t=105991

Thanks for the honest feed bro, I appreciate it. But I just wanted to say something. I made records back then, and I still do, a variety of them. So this wasn't a lyrical song, this was a girl song, and yeah I hate mixing, that's why I'ma head to the studio and all that will be taken care of, and yeah I agree about the layering vocals part. I appreciate you saying I have potential. I really think I can be lyrical, and real as well. Like I want to be a mix of a lyrical emcee and a 2pac- who made real records, love records, etc. as well, so I say my style is everything. I definitely want to collab with you as well. I will post my album which will be recorded professionally on here when it's done and I look fwd to working with you as well. The flow I agree needs to be worked on, I think that is my weak flaw when it comes to either content or flow. Thanks again bro. I'll check out your song.

I got a question though, about the expression in the voice, doesn't it make for a better song with expression, or not so much sometimes? I realize it's also how you deliver the expression in your voice and I didn't deliver it properly, so I'll work on that as well.