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B.O.D

Postby l33chie » Jan 31st, '12, 01:47




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Re: B.O.D

Postby Ticalrecords » Jan 31st, '12, 19:41

this was pretty good man i liked your flow alot and your delivery was also on point. your mixing is also pretty good, at one point in the beginning i like what you did your voice to make it sound like another person was answering. but yeah good stuff.

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Re: B.O.D

Postby Scrubz » Feb 2nd, '12, 05:41

Punch ins were pretty obvious. Flow was good, lyrics were alright, nothing revolutionary, just the typical "wanna make it" shit. You probably should a) practice the lyrics more and b) get better takes because you delivery kinda fell off as the song went along and got more technical. I say this because it happens to me quite often. I think if you take more time to get everything right and on point, you will make a hit. Deff like what i hear, just needs some fine tuning.
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Re: B.O.D

Postby DeAngelo Bailey » Feb 3rd, '12, 00:18

sounds really old school.. the flow is a little boring.. some of the punches were pretty good.. not enough individual character references (who are you?,where are you from?. what do you do? what topic are you describing?) it doesn't have any narrative)
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Re: B.O.D

Postby Solace » Feb 4th, '12, 03:14

The way you record, I think you could've been closer to the mic, or it could possibly be the reverb you used during mixing to make it sound like your further away. Lyrics were alright, and your flow was pretty smooth (but only due to your obvious punch ins). Polish up the punch ins (definitely reduce them as much as possible) and try to structure your writings so that you don't need to punch in and have proper time to breathe and regain your energy. :y:
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