All We Need - Tash8 (Produced By Tash8)

[Tash8]

Yo,

A new song I just made, it's like my 3rd or 4th song I've ever made. I had written the lyrics before I made the beat so that was kinda hard to make it work but whatever.

Listen:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/3120597178a2ae/

Lyrics:
Yo, all I need is some light, one pad, one pen
one mind to start the tale of some men
only had they won then, more breath and no death
one god to show he can help them

it's a new day, a few men working hard
in a cruel way, so they child won't starve
don't scar they lives, and they one heart

one day, Ray's awakened from his child's cries
slowely walks to his bed and sees his child's eyes
turning red and glows when he saw him blink
so he rushes him to the faucet sink,
but the water won't flow, nothing for the eyes to rinse
minutes later his whole body starts to flinch

Yo, all We need is hope..
All We need is hope.. [some hope]
All We need is hope.. [some hope]
All We need is hope.. [some hope]

Thanks,
Tash8

[Mc-Itty]

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[Tash8]

thanks

and the reason i did that, is well the firs 4 bars were the intro then the rest were just a 12 bar drop but what kept happening is i was going off the beat because like i said had prewritten it and stuff, so yea.. shit happens

anyways thx for feed

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

ummm...yea i feelin this all we need is (some hope) part aswell
kool mixing aswell yea flow was a bit off somtimes...
keep it up

[B.A.D.]

ayo, this track is good

the lyrics are too easy but they flow nice

the quality improved a lot bro

nice track

[Tash8]

ayo, this track is good

the lyrics are too easy but they flow nice

the quality improved a lot bro

nice track

i tried rapping more complex lyrics and i tjust didn't work out, so gotta start with easy

and thx for feed peepz

and yea i learned how to clean up my quality ..

[Flamez]

it was good man short but good

[Kez]

Hope this feed is good enough for you Tash

Beat's pretty good. Works well for the track.
Verse sounds okay. However it sounds a bit too forced. At times you go quiet from loud, disrupts the feel of it. Lyrics i could not understand the concept of just barely. The fuck is this shit with his kid's eyes going red?
Flow was decent.
I like the hook, sounds good. I liked how you had One Mic in the background of it.
I thought it would of sounded really good if you'd finished that hook and let the beat just fade out slowly. Would of worked perfectly for the feel of the track, but just my opinion.
Overall: 7/10

[Tash8]

thanks man!

great review.

the concept was just like a story i saw on tv once and i was listening to one mic and this idea just hit me... and i wrote the lyrics.. then created the beat for it.

and yea i get what your saying with it being to forced i'm seeing that now.. and the quiet to loud thing, if you hear One Mic, he gradually becomes louder and louder, i was tyring to something similar except have it be for every few bars like from story telling to intenseness.

[baller4life]

Good job.

[mart85]

you sound much better than the last time I heard you rap I liked the concept... and you had better delivery than your previous songs... and about pre-written lyrics, don't be afraid to change some lines to make it really flow well to the beat when it's necessary, altho it wasn't bad in this case

as far as the beat, it was nice, I liked the melody... but I wasn't sure about the drums... I didn't like the snare that much (it might just be me tho)... I thought it could be louder and I wasn't really feeling the kick

anyways, yeah it was a nice track keep it up

[Tash8]

thanks baller4life

thanks mart,

about the snare, lol umm i forgot who, but someone else told me it was too loud, so i made it lower. oh and i was using Vynl Sanple pack or something, so they were kinda weird haha

thanks again for feed

[baller4life]

thanks baller4life

Anytime.

[Rapsoldier101]

i liked the beat, i liked the concept and the one mic thing but ur flow sounded off beat at times, if u worked on that a lil would have been a great track