Couple Request Songs Fullfilled!

[CaptivatingVokalz]

Hi everybody!! I had a couple request from people to do these songs so I finally did it! Hope you like... CONSTRUCTIVE feed ladies and gents...don't be mean Examples:My weaknesses and strengths and all

--This one is the Star Spangled Banner (YAY America ) http://www.zshare.net/audio/3306887fd14a7d/

--This one is "Lost Ones" -originally done by Jay Z... I tried
http://www.zshare.net/audio/33069503a057ca/

--And this one is hardly 40 seconds...I was practicing my high notes with a Mariah Carey verse
http://www.zshare.net/audio/3306980ab65c03/

[Xray]

Are these youre songs or others songs but you sung them or somfin???

[Call Me Pik]

i like the spangeled banner one and u look kinda like this girl i was wit bak in tha day h/o imma get a picture n post it




Difference? your prolly tanner n a lil skinner

[Enimee]

wtf call me pik dat was random and uhhh more then stupid...cute chick tho



O! and Captivationg if im right that was u on those tracks and if so nice work...i wanna hear more tho

[mart85]

Star Spangled Banner : hmm...playball? lol, kinda weird to hear that song but it was nicely performed

"Lost Ones": now I was feeling this song a lot more... my favorite from the 3, you could showcase your great voice and the song was real nice to listen to, no complaints from me

Mariah Carey verse: real nice once again, sorry but I don't have any criticism

well if you absolutely want to have some criticism lol, here's something I noticed that maybe you could think about: especially in the US anthem, you often do all type of things with your voice, you know, going up and down, and you make the word last a few seconds etc... it sounds nice and I guess you do that to put your voice to the test, and show that you can sing, which is good but sometimes it can distract from the song, and I think it's better when you have that type of things just a few times in a song... it becomes more effective that way it depends on the song tho, the mood etc... well anyways, I'm sure you already knew all this lol, just wanted to criticize a bit

keep it up, you've got real talent

[Kojack]

i like the spangeled banner one and u look kinda like this girl i was wit bak in tha day h/o imma get a picture n post it




Difference? your prolly tanner n a lil skinner

This girl has tits. Excellent tits.

[CaptivatingVokalz]

Thanks Mart for the criticism...you could've left it out, I wouldn't mind lol Just kidding...but yeah thanks...I know I tend to over sing...I gotta drop that habit. I'm always willing to take advice from my my little personal producer lol Thanks again baby boy

[CaptivatingVokalz]

i like the spangeled banner one and u look kinda like this girl i was wit bak in tha day h/o imma get a picture n post it




Difference? your prolly tanner n a lil skinner

This girl has tits. Excellent tits.

I look way betterrrrr lol just kidding... but yeah could we leave the perverted comments in the bedroom... thanks!!

[Tash8]

he's 14 so just ignore him

anywayas, i listened to thiese a while ago, and forgot to feed, but i agree with mart about the voice thing, it's not you it's everyone now a days, just sing it without all these extraness, IMO it takes away from the anthem and it annoys me

but still real good, so good yea, u should start doing hooks for peepz


"my mom got raped by the industry then made me"

[$0 R3@L]

Hmm you do tend to 'over sing' some parts.Its like Mariah Carey and her high notes,she dont need to do it but always feels the need to prove she can do it...i dunno why.It just makes it sound forced and un-natural when female singers do that.Work on that a little and your chart material.

Great work,jayz track was my fav btw

[slut-tina]

nice songs but that girls tits are no where near my bazookas

[Greece Lightning]

kojak has bigger bazokies, man boobs

[slut-tina]

kojak has bigger bazokies, man boobs

omg kojack u wanna play boob shaker

[Mc Cubz]

thers sumthing about ur voice just special,
fuk the non-perfcet quality on sum of the recordings, the talent is wht matters

cant wait for our collab!

[Call Me Pik]

thers sumthing about ur voice just special,
fuk the non-perfcet quality on sum of the recordings, the talent is wht matters

cant wait for our collab!

thats real true, it doesn't matter that much about the quality if ur that good kuz the talent overshadows everything else. However, when you over sing to much it makes it sound like your trying to sing.......not singing from the heart...theres a difference i mean some times its ok when its a real emotional part but not at parts that dont really need to be stretched out.

you might wanna check out this girl on youtube tah get a better feel for wht im talking about http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DI_xh5BaMdw&mode=related&search=

but i think once you got all the minor kinks werked out that u shud try gettin intah a studio tho im sure they will welcome you with open arms, unless its not ur thing makin ur own songs or suhin

also i neva gotta response about if u wanted to do that so many tears joint that i'm werkin on the way i wrote the hook whud sound real good wit ur voice...get at me tomm if u can thnks