New Emotional Track "I'm Sorry For..." DelinQuent

[DelinQuent]

it's been out for almost a week but i just decided to post it here.
very emotional song for me, 3rd verse is my favorite...
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInf ... ID=5714852
thanks.

LYRICS-
Hook-never bein strong, never holdin on
being such a kid, acting so rediculous
secluding myself, refusing your help

i have never been the best, never stood out from the rest/
but i've always held my head, and tried to work it out/
but that's not what this is bout, let me apollogize/
for all the fucking times, that i refused to change/
and i just remained the same, brought my self so much pain/
yes i am all to blame, i played my own game/
with the most twisted rules, now i wonder who'll/
step up to the plate, and try to fix me wait/
i don't think i can be fixed, i am as i've always been/
a fucking piece of shit, this is not a guilt trip/
it's me it's who i am, act like you give a damn/
you're here to hear the rhymes, with no plan to spend no time/
if you offer assistance, i'll prolly say forget it/
i'm too fuckin independant, but i depend on these women/
cause i still need their attention, just to prove they're love is with me/
my moods are mind bending, that is why i am/

hook-fuckin up so much, giving up when it was tough/
never caring for your love, never showing you my trust/
procrastinating everything, i coulda been a better kid/

now i know that you all hate it, but i tend to be impatient/
i don't wanna spend life waitin, and sometimes i get pushy/
a little bit of a bully, cause i have a bad temper/
and it seems to fade with age, seems to worsen everyday/
let me be forever blamed, for everything i'll never say/
see i still can't admit, that's it all my fault/
for being who i am, i brought this on my self/
by refusing your help, when you chose to love/
i chose to run, yes i was so dumb/
yes i fucked up, yes i ruined us/
and that's prolly what's, tearing down my heart/
and i'm falling all apart, if i'da known from the start/
i'da never broke ya heart, but i cannot turn back time/
and yes that that's why, i always apollogize/
if i wasn't so blind, you would still be mine/
but i ran off, i'm so god damn soft/

hook-always lookin down, ignorin love i'd found/
always sittin in my room, always bumpin these tunes/
publicsizing my life, but without out rap i'd die/

my poetry is me, i find comfort in it see/
when i am all a mess, i justs sit down and confess/
not to no god, but to these 16 bars/
i just put it on the page, and it helps me with my rage/
see i strive to be better, and its not lookin good/
lately i've just been shook, so afriad of what's ahead/
feels like inside i'm dead, if you could dive into my head/
you would cry yourself to bed, i can't say i never did/
but i won't tell you that i have, i won't tell you i've been sad/
everytime i'm mad, sorry i treat you bad/
i'm hardly on the edge, i don't think there's much left/
have i struggled to the end?, is this just it for me?/
i've put in all i've had, i guess it's not enough/
sorry i acted tough, when you need me i run/
cause i need you too, and i'm too weak to do/
anything to help us both, but i'm sorry as you know...

hook- ruining your life, but i'd never do it twice
ignoring all your calls, not having the balls/
not lookin at ya face, i'm am a damn disgrace/

[B.A.D.]

man u is a fuckin genious

ya'll know that this is my typa track, loving the beat on it (who produced it btw?)

the lyrics are simple, but its better like that for this kinda tracks

only one thing: you should turn the instrumental a bit louder

the mixing of the vocals is perfect

the flow n structure is amazing

third verse is a masterpiece

[DelinQuent]

the beat is Forgive Me by VTZ on soundclick.
thanks for the tip about the volume of the instrumental.

[B.A.D.]

mind taking a listen to my "break down"track

hope ya like it

[CaptivatingVokalz]

I never heard your work before and I must admit...I'm loving your style. The lyrics fit the beat like a glove. I love the lyrics/hook... the topic seems deep and heavy and it has the potential to establish goosebumps upon hearing but the only thing missing is delivery. Trying expressing your voice more...like when people hear you...let them hear how sorry you are through your voice-like get into you know? I think you have the voice for it-you just need to find that inner rapper in you that will deliver expressively to the listeners- overall, great job on the song, looking forward to hearing more

[DelinQuent]

thanks for the feed. can't wait to hear your hook for so many tears. i'm the first verse in that.
on the subject of putting more emotion into my voice, i tend to struggle with that on more deep songs. i have no problem sounding angry tho lol
again, thanks.

[Mc Cubz]

i agree wid captain vocals, u sound like me on a song i did called final love song, not like me but the same tone of voice, and if u force ur voice out abit more, like breathe in hard and rap harder, then after a few months or so of practise, u wont have to try ul hve a more powerfull voice, the song itself is coool as fuk, nice tune, btw it souds welll like captainvocals on the hook lol/

[mart85]

nice track man... but yeah, the beat should be louder... it kinda felt like you weren't always perfectly on beat, but that might be because the beat was low, so it was hard to judge... but the track itself is real nice seriously, I liked it... and yeah, a little more emotion in your voice would have made it even better...

anyways, it's a real nice track man, keep it up

[DelinQuent]

i appreciate all the feedback and i'll be sure to try and work on everything mentioned. thanks again.

[Xray]

I never heard your work before and I must admit...I'm loving your style. The lyrics fit the beat like a glove. I love the lyrics/hook... the topic seems deep and heavy and it has the potential to establish goosebumps upon hearing but the only thing missing is delivery. Trying expressing your voice more...like when people hear you...let them hear how sorry you are through your voice-like get into you know? I think you have the voice for it-you just need to find that inner rapper in you that will deliver expressively to the listeners- overall, great job on the song, looking forward to hearing more

pretty much wat she said and yo we gots to colab mayne keep the good shit comming

[DelinQuent]

yeah def, i'll collab with pretty much anyone. you always come with hot shit so we can def do somethin, just PM me or IM me on aim at delinquentisdq

[Xray]

aiit check ur PM