Guns Come Out- Ice Killa

[Requiem]

^i kno, u said basically it was one of my better tracks cuz i stayed on beat the whole time. or was that soon you'll see u reviewed
either way, u thought this was an improvement too. so that's good news. 4 tracks in, and i'm pointing up.

[preest]

to tell you the truth I aint really feelin' it, it's kinda got a "soujaboy tryin to talk hard" sound!!

it sounds like there wasnt much heart put into it, but I think with a bit of practise you could be a sick rapper though, just gotta work on ya voice and angst!!

keep grinding though, I aint hating just constructive critisism!

[Jay-19]

You sound like a fragile robot.

Anyways, beat is horrible, no hating, just what I'm thinking.
Your lyrics are pretty neat but the delivery isn't that good to be honest.



And seriously man, Ice Killa as a rap-name sounds.. hmm.. bad...?

[<VerbalTouch>]

You sound like a fragile robot.

Anyways, beat is horrible, no hating, just what I'm thinking.
Your lyrics are pretty neat but the delivery isn't that good to be honest.



And seriously man, Ice Killa as a rap-name sounds.. hmm.. bad...?

naw shut up he kills ice

[Requiem]

nobody likes the beat o well, i guess it's your taste. i mean, i wrote lyrics specifically for that, so it fits fine. i did this awhile back, it's still only my 4th track ever

i'm still grindin tho, going to improve as much as i can, because i'm not great until i have TR's approval.
@Killa Goat and Preest, thx for commenting. every criticism helps, makes me wanna do better next time.

[Solace]

And seriously man, Ice Killa as a rap-name sounds.. hmm.. bad...?

i told him to change it to Frozen Cock but he wouldnt listen

[Robbie G]

Damn man.

I agree with what people have said here basically, you still have work to do.

That being said I actually enjoyed this lol, your flowed well.

[Requiem]

^ thx i know it isn't like freaking incredible, but it's improvement. and that's good too.

[Solace]

you sound like you couldnt even pick up a gun. you aint killin shit.

its not like you could do better.

[Requiem]

@postshady, it's a whole 'don't touch me' thing. cuz if u touch me, i'm swingin. end of story. i may not use guns, but i got verbal weapons, do u wanna take a shot at me?

[Solace]

@postshady, it's a whole 'don't touch me' thing. cuz if u touch me, i'm swingin. end of story. i may not use guns, but i got verbal weapons, do u wanna take a shot at me?

I think he got banned cause all his posts are deleted if you havent noticed

[DelinQuent]

what is that beat? lol i hated it.

hook was weak, very weak. just couldnt get into it.

i didnt expect this, but your flow is actually decent. the lyrics were weak but those can be worked on.

rhyming is very simple and it's easy to see you havent been rapping for very long. your delivery isnt very good either, needs some more emotion into it, gotta sound like you care about what you're saying.

overall... weak. good thing is you have what seems to be a firm concept of flow which i found to be the hardest thing to do. lyrics will continue to improve the more you write. invest in a new mic if you wanna sound a lot better. also when you get a new mic, do some overlays and it'll make your delivery sound a bit better. keep working

[Requiem]

@ delinquent, thx a whole bunch man. some real criticism with alot of helpful tips. really apreciated man. i'm definitely going to work harder on delivery, and once i get paid, i'm investing in a new mic thx for the feed

[Robbie G]

you sound like you couldnt even pick up a gun. you aint killin shit.

its not like you could do better.

who the hell is postshady..I keep hearing references and quotes of him but not posts...