Make It to the Top (Practice Track)

[Requiem]

Experimenting with productions, and samples; just whipped up some lyrics, recorded, and mixed. not trying to break any boundaries with this, cuz it's experimental, but i would love feed on what i need to work on. just trying something new, also i know hook sucks. so i know that, but what i'm looking for is feed on production side, and feed on the verses

http://www.zshare.net/audio/511181371416f596/

[Requiem]

sweet man^ thx for the feed hope u feel better
glad u liked the verses and flow, cuz i was experimenting with that as well. tyring to do a little more slow ish. thanx for the feed again

[B.A.D.]

hmm k on the beat you need to master every instrument you use
like the drums, and for the melodies you need a structured rythm cuz otherwise it sounds frootyloopish.. still needs a lot of work, but well.. practice makes the master

also its better if you have a keyboard pluged in to the computer for beats.

about the verses, lyrics are fire including the hook, flow is good but doesn't matches the beat

but its always good to experiment so keep it going

[Requiem]

^thx big ax i could use help on making melodies, if u wanna walk me through it. we could talk on msn
btw, i'm changing my LP into EP, and i'm almost done with it. so if u can work on cover art for me, i would be forever grateful.
i'ma message u what i want on the cover....

[gladimnotsoluble]

i love your voice

but you start really weirdly...offbeat and just coming off

then the pause before your chorus doesn't really work

the pauses in general don't work

this has good verses..but the beat is kind of boring


overall it's just an okay song--there's no energy or anything that make it special, but ti's definitely better than a lot of stuff on this site


and i agree that the chorus needs work, it needs some MUSIC to it, know what i mean?

goodjob

[Solace]

Quick Review:

Well firstly, i think the beat was pretty nice. The hook kinda ruined it, but thats just a lil thing. I really liked the flow I didnt like the pause either before the chorus, as gladimnotsoluble said. Not the best delivery. Keep it up man.

PS. The beat kinda sounded like some background music for an alien planet video lmao, i just noticed that. Still good tho.

[Requiem]

^thx for the comments/feed. glad the voice and flow is working out. i know the pauses don't work usually, only exception is dre's next episode...
but i'm definitely going to be working harder, and on these things for my next song