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Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 15th, '10, 04:36

Feed: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=99631

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You don’t know what love is, but its dark as this,
Loves a drivin force, until it park and sit,
So it’s again square one and my heart is pissed,
There was a flame yeah, and now the spark is missed,
But when it was lit, I called her arsonist,
When she poisoned it, I called her arsenic,
When she stole it, I called her larcenist,
Wanted to call her love, but then she started this…
And now, no one knows, how I slow and go for broke,
Showin jokes, to hide the pain, still I vie to find the same,
Asking why I am insane, and heated, as the dyin flame,
I’m denying but I’m trying to pick myself up,
To be well enough to yell I need some help just,
To get my head outta the waters I been drownin in,
If I was up and out, I wouldn’t be down and in,
But maybe that’s the sound of love that I found again…

She had never thought love was a dark as this,
It was a drivin force, so I’d park and sit,
She’s at square one, and now her heart is pissed,
She saw a flame yeah, but the spark is missed,
And when it was lit, she’d call me arsonist,
Then I poisoned it, she'd call me arsenic,
Then I stole it, she'd call me larcenist,
All she wanted was to call me love, until I started this…
So all she does is cry, if only I wasn’t lies,
But will the truth, mean a thing, if she doesn’t try,
If I could answer that, maybe then I’d have her back,
But it’s battle that is lost, and that is fact,
So now I sit and think, what she took and didn’t bring,
And how it got so big, it started with the little things,
We hurt each other to the point that we can never leave,
And no one else can heal the wounds because we let em bleed…

At one point in time we had it all, but it had ta fall,
So I’m sitting here picking pieces from a shattered wall,
See the picture broke itself, so many times,
But the frameworks there, so can we shine?
We share a bond so deep, it’s like a secret pact,
It’s not that I want you, see I need you back,
And if you say I’m being stupid and narrow minded,
From my chest I’ll pull, cupids arrow then rewind it…

Feedback, as always appreciated :y:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby gutawafang » Oct 15th, '10, 05:40

You're as sick as MC Anonymus. I don't mean to compare. I just wanna say that you're the best Audiohead here apart from MC Anonymus. xD

All the lyrics I can relate to. All relevant to me. All makes sense. Delivery is sick. You're crazy brother. :worship: You're underrated man.

Man, I'ma remember ya for good man. I repeat. You're SICK. :worship:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 15th, '10, 07:21

gutawafang wrote:You're as sick as MC Anonymus. I don't mean to compare. I just wanna say that you're the best Audiohead here apart from MC Anonymus. xD

All the lyrics I can relate to. All relevant to me. All makes sense. Delivery is sick. You're crazy brother. :worship: You're underrated man.

Man, I'ma remember ya for good man. I repeat. You're SICK. :worship:


Damn, again thanks for the feed, def is great to read what you have to say. Thanks again :worship:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby B.A.D. » Oct 15th, '10, 08:38

I love your flow on this man, sounds a bit too eminemish, but thats not necesarily a bad thing, cuz actually is not that easy to do... but some people might be bothered by it... u know people in this world :tounge2: lol haha.. but I did loved it... really pro... on the second verse there was a slip on the first bars.. but didnt affect the track much.

the beat is great made, very pro, however, not my style.. but still can't deny its good... the hook I didnt liked it a lot, I dunno, too poppy for me

did you had autotune on your layovers???.... or maybe there was something weird with the mixing... I dunno... also when you mixing, maybe take out a bit of the high frequencies cuz they might affect on the overall quality... what I did liked is that you had great volume on your vocals, made it very pleasureable to listen to...

honestly... AMAZING song except for the beat and hook... imagin if this would've been on an extremely sad piano beat with a smooth and sadder hook... that woule've been A-FUCKING-MAZING.

great ass track man, good job. be proud of yaself :y:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby gutawafang » Oct 15th, '10, 09:16

Big Ax-D wrote:I love your flow on this man, sounds a bit too eminemish



And word to Big. :y:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Mc Cubz » Oct 15th, '10, 11:17

yes yes good song man - some others on your myspace are good too! Lyrics are good especially the 'wanted to call her love' bit! :b: I'd like to collab with you - www.myspace.com/mccubz - let me know if you'd be interested!
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby SajN » Oct 16th, '10, 01:26

Man... This was even better than the other song I gave you feedback on... except the hook, didn't really like it.

But your delivery, holy crap!
Lyrics, really nice!
Flow, very nice!

Loved it!


And I agree with Ax-D, seems like you have autotune a couple of places lol
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby dR3 » Oct 16th, '10, 01:35

I have said it before, and I'll say it again, you never disappoint.

Love everything about this joint, the beat, the flow, the delivery, even the auto-tuned hook lol. This song is going in my collection for sure. Keep this up, I think you have a big chance of making it big, seriously.

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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 16th, '10, 04:32

Thanks you all for the feedback, seriously guys I appreciate it so much :worship:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Tash8 » Oct 16th, '10, 19:20

i've already told u what i thought..but i'll bump it for u :p
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Solace » Oct 16th, '10, 23:45

This is fucking great.
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 20th, '10, 22:43

Now this is a great track! I always like your personal songs better than the typical rap songs, your material is very relate able, man. Other than the hook, I think this is pretty dope. I love the lyrics and your flow is smooth on this aswell, very laid back yet you can still hear the aggression when you want us to.

Good stuff man, you're coming along very nicely! I'ma email you tonight about that beat I sent you!
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby NicoleEM » Oct 20th, '10, 23:44

Starting to be a fan here :D Good tracks :y:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby Emadyville » Oct 21st, '10, 03:22

Thank you steve and nicole, appreciate it :y:
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Re: Losing It (Twisted Love Song)

Postby JBM » Oct 21st, '10, 22:29

This ones even better, you could easily have this played on this radio. Flow, hook, delivery, All great. Finding it hard to find something construcive lol. Keep it up man.
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