Cookzee - 2011 UK MC Showcase

[Cookzee]

hey guys, so i started a UK showcase, tell me how you think i did, i tried using punchlines for the first time

heres the link to the Cookzee - 2011 UK MC Showcase: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=946wk7Bhbw4

feedback link: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=115467&p=1656801#p1656801

lyrics to the showcase:
so many raps in the bag it's hard to choose from em
call my enemies extra... coz i chew on em
disturbing murking push it further put em in the furnace
an burn with lyrics my limit knows no boundaries im too certain
you guys are small i'll tyranosarus rex ya
the booth is like my laboratory and im genius
so in other words, you could call me dexter
the only time you get a buzz is when your mother texts ya
ooooo.... that's gotta hurt em
i remember being kicked when i was down by so people
now im up again... about to blow it up into an ash cloud
rivaling iceland...cold murder
o he's going cold on em
michael is an ice man he's practically froze on em
i just anal raped the zack and fucking cody twins,
mary kate & ashleigh motherfucker... both of them
man in this game im feeling like im darth vader
coz when someone even thinks of dissing me...force choke on em
im a hard dick when i fuck... man this games pussy
but on this beat im feeling bold... like jade goody

[Kez]

From the Midlands, respect, same as me haha. West or East?
Well I give you respect for not rapping trying to copy people as you see so often these days
And for not trying to dress like one haha
There was barely a flow lol, at some points it sounded like you just missed the beat so you carried on regardless. Like on the Darth Vader line especially lol.
Some of the lyrics were pretty good though, the buzz line was funny.

I'm assuming you're new to this shit so it could have been much much worse, so you did a decent job

[Cookzee]

thanks very much, and nahh im not new to it really but i wanted it to be a one take thing, to avoid any fakeness, but i see what you're saying, and i live in the east midlands area

[Instant Legend]

this is pretty good
i couldnt decide what i thought of the beat at first, but when it dropped it came in nice

you got a pretty good flow

nice and short, but solid

hollar back folks, some newer shit!

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