Coleon- Keep It Real Free Verse

[classthe_king]

Just a little something over the Keep It Real instrumental by Milkbone.
Big L and Jay-Z made it famous with their 7 minute freestyle.





Lyrics:
Reanimated for this track, I got J Dilla scratchin
Big L ad libbin, Roc Raida mix an' masterin'
I'm straight forward, never been one for actin'
If I'm pickin ya brain, it's in an Abe Reles fashion
It's Kid Twist, I spit sickness captured
Inside multi syllabic rhymes that I'm craftin
Even plastered intricate patterns
Are arranged and displayed by my brain for the masses
If I drafted half the shit you draft I'd try to trade up
Fuck with Coleon and get ate up
Say what? You think you'll verbally murder me
When I had rhyme schemes with internals in the nursey
Burn MC's to the third degree no matter who the person be
Surgeon's be given me commision just for your fees
Refer to me, as the winner, or the better man
Jaw bone, strong and tone like a pelican's
Repremand your body parts, then I tear em all apart
Just to sell em out my trunk and call em anatomic art
Cocky, smart, handsome, not very tall but dark
Mouth wet, from house pets tryna out swim a shark
I'll leave scars on MC's who think they got bars
The capital C, reminds em that they're not hard
Pop stars, yeah call the cops, I'll slice the chord
To leave their 911's Dunn like Ryan's Porsh




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[Kez]

Honestly nothing that really impressed me. Generic standard "I am the best" fare.

[classthe_king]

Honestly nothing that really impressed me. Generic standard "I am the best" fare.

Which is why he just used it as a throwaway hot verse and didn't put it on a track.

[Mahmoud48]

can u explain the ryan dunn punchline i didnt get it

[Kez]

Honestly nothing that really impressed me. Generic standard "I am the best" fare.

Which is why he just used it as a throwaway hot verse and didn't put it on a track.

Right it's not a hot verse though.

[Block]

I wasn't feeling the flow on this. I see he tried to do, but it didn't work. He was trying to catch the snare way too much.. Also, the last 3- 4 lines were very fast and off beat.

Overall decent delivery though

[WakeUpShow]

The Abe Reles line was nice.

[Chet Starr]

How he said -syllabic- had me giggling

[classthe_king]

Pronouncing it right

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

i liked how you was experimenting with voice levels..and delivery in general
but didnt sound 100% confident..as you still was experimenting..but keep goin that way practise makes perfect....close to perfect? i dont know
umm...wasnt feeling the flow either...nothing that made me go ... kinda have to agree with kez..nothing impressing..
i like how your quality keeps gettin clearer...also your pronouncation
keep at it..you def got potential as killa said...

[Nick. Y]

shit was tight as fuck, nice job holms

[Artille]

Wasn't really feeling this that much. I mean lyrics were dope as hell, some seemed like you were trying too hard to rhyme, but they were nice. Your flow was good as it normally is, but I didn't really like it on this beat. Mixing was okay, a bit spotty at times, but not garbage. Nice drop though.

[_Ironic_]

lyrics were cool, everything else wasn't feelin so much... but coleon u got some potenial..you should really up in confidence, I can really see you taking off.

peep my track if u want