AhdduB - A Break Up Song

[Ticalrecords]

yo just recorded this song tell me what ya think. its just 50 bars of double time w no hook

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http://soundcloud.com/ahddub/a-break-up-song-prod-by

The pain in my heart is tormenting
I don’t give a fuck if more venting
Gets me no where – wherever you are
I would go there – say true art
Is born from the personal experience
what I would do to not be hearing this,
from my own lips – just know this
is a life experience we will grow with/
I swear it hurts - so much
Feeling so sick I could throw up
the comfort food I ate
Tryna medicate and do my thang,
This is the first day – I didn’t laugh
I used to say – that I did this rap
I just wanted to - make you proud
so everytime - I take you out/
Everyone knows – who ya with
Yea mafucka – the coolest kid
that dropped out of school and did
exactly what erryone thought was foolishness
and came back laughing his ass off
to a pissed off dad and a mad mom
like was that all? What a sad song,
yall were playing me – I take my hat off/
to yall for playing devils advocate
like whatever I yell is blasphemous
But fuck it – why did you leave?
you meant the world to me
Why - at the height of everything
Its not like I offered you a wedding ring
Its not like I pulled an eminem
and went and wrote a second Kim/
I even stopped - using drugs
Some call that the truest love
What the fuck – did you do to us?
We didn’t even have a sham or ruse to bust
I’d do anything to make it right
You didn’t even use a break up line
appalled when you quoted Seinfeld,
I recall so well - how our eyes fell/
On the fucking check - when it came
Both reached for it then drew away
Threw away – any chance of us
I’m sure anyone that glanced at us
Prolly Thought we were a happy couple
Yup And I guess then that’s the trouble
Yea We always kept up appearances
No matter how somber and serious/
My screams of pain could shatter glass
I could cause a motherfucking avalanche
Everything that I’ve been tryna do
Has one goal – to describe to you,
How much pain my soul is in
Please – I don’t wanna be alone again
its so sad – I wish we’d hold hands,
while the DJ plays a slow dance/

[Steve Spag]

I don't know if it's the beat or the studio equipment you're using but there's a lot of static in the background. Other than that this is pretty enjoyable, I'm really digging your faster flow. The beat is pretty chill, I like the flute (or sax?), Ron Burgundy would approve, haha.

[Ticalrecords]

thanks man i really appreciate it. and yea its the beat itself that makes tht staticy sound, idk why haha