EoverƆ - Need Some Sleep

[NoColor]

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I made a lot of stray songs before but this one I put in a little extra effort.

Please check it out!!

EDIT: LOL IM A JOKE.

Here it is:

http://soundcloud.com/allen-eoverc-lee/need-some-sleep

[TripleNineThree]

Did you forget to post your song? haha

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Did you forget to post your song? haha

Haha never seen that one before maybe you do need some sleep! lol.

[TripleNineThree]

Wow..

This track was sick man.

Delivery - The delivery was great. A lot of people sound like they are reading off their lyrics as they rap but I can definately feel your lyrics because of the way you rap them. You have a nice amount of emotion in this track. - 9/10

Flow - Your flow is solid. I didn't really notice any place that you fell off the beat. It was easy to listen to and had my head bobbing, great job! - 9.5/10

Mixing - The mixing was also great. I can tell that you actually know what you're doing when it comes to mixing your tracks. There was a good variety of effects and things you tried and it made it so it was less boring. (The mixing at the end of the track was really sick!) - 9.5/10

Lyrics - These were good. I heard a couple of good multis in the song. The lyrics weren't anything real impressive but they contained a message which, imo, is better than a complex rhyme scheme. 9/10

Overall - This was a really solid track. I'm looking forward to hearing more from you. Goodjob man!! - 9.5/10


Do you mind returning the feed?? Thanks bro! - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=147653

[NoColor]

i just heard it and gave it a review. i got one question though.

There's no way i deserve a 9 on any of those criterias after hearing your song.
Damn man, youre too generous lol

[Eedee]

I agree with Triple.

Your vocal quality was great, great mixing!
Lyrics were deep, not very good rhyming but it was passable.
Delivery and emotion was great.
The hook was ehhhh, too... simplistic, IMO. Just didn't sound good.

Your accent was enjoyable as well.

Good job!

[Solace]

This is definitely pretty good. Not feeling the hook though, your singing sounds really awkward and off. What is your accent? You definitely know what you're doing in most areas of recording, though I felt your vocals were a bit too loud and overpowered the beat in the verses. I could only ask of you to work on writing and it will no doubt improve your quality. Not that your writing is bad, but nicer schemes would be great to hear. The part where it gets a little electric...Woah that was sick. Who produced this lol? This sample is used a lot but I haven't heard this beat yet.

[NoColor]

Thank you for the listen Solace!
Could you specify how I could improve my writing? I've been trying but I don't know where to start.
I mean I put in a lot of multis but I don't know what else I could do.

Telling Beatzz made the first part of the beat and Bassleak made the electronic part.
I had to get permission from both of 'em.

I mixed them with that scratching transition.

So I technically produced it as a whole!

Edit: And I got a Californian accent... But I don't think there's such an accent. It might've sounded weird because I was singing along the up pitched sample. IDK.

[Kez]

I'm surprised at the caliber of the artists here nowadays. This was surprisingly good.

The beat is fucking lovely, loved it the second it came on. The hook fits it absolutely perfect and your singing didn't bother me at all.

Your voice projects really well and I like the clarity when you do the verses, there wasn't much slurring of words that I could tell. You have a good accent for rap, that is to say a pretty standard American one.

Your flow was good for the most part but it could do with a tiny bit of tightening. The bit about Columbine midway through the first verse sounded a bit loose. But overall, good enough for the most part.

Of course I liked the lyrics and content, totally my kind of shit. Nothing to really say about that.

Oh god what the fuck happened. Why did you do that to the end of the song? Lol I am not a fan of that man, not at all. Completely ruined the vibe for me personally. Take that out and the rest was sweet. This track made me want to collab with you.

[mdemaz]

Well, fuck.

I'll admit it, I was reluctant to peep this, but I was really blown away.

I really like the delivery here; I was really comfortable with your voice and I didn't feel like you were out of place at all.
That's a really hard thing to do for me considering I'm starting to get sick of audio and shit now.

For someone to be able to make me comfortable listening to them is really good.

I guess all I can say is try to push yourself to higher peaks, listen to criticism even if you know that the person is full of shit.

Just try to impress everyone and rise as high as you can.

You sound like you are where you are meant to be.

[NoColor]

Thank you.
Yeah I've noticed that some people like certain parts while others hate it.

I'll try to impress everyone with my new works

[Vettori]

The beat is awesome, Sample sounds cool too, but is a little bit difficult to decypher

Well your no amateur, though a little more experience wouldn't be a bad thing. Work on your content, Try to get more in touch with the song and concept.

Flows good, Nothing too stand out. Sounded very average.Not a fan of the Adlibs in the second verse.
where the voice changed. I actually do like what I think you could become. Keep trying at this man. A lot of potential.

[NoColor]

Thank you so much for all your listens and feedbacks.

Is there anyone specific in this community that people go to get help mixing tracks?

I'm really just starting in that field and I want to either learn or have someone do it for me.

Thank you!

[Eedee]

Thank you so much for all your listens and feedbacks.

Is there anyone specific in this community that people go to get help mixing tracks?

I'm really just starting in that field and I want to either learn or have someone do it for me.

Thank you!

TripleNineThree is a God at mixing tracks (yes, pun intended).

[Blind]

Aight.. Sample is nice, good pick. Flow is tight, fits the vibe of the beat. Not really fan of such concepts but it all sounds good. I like the way you switched the beat at bridge, nice work on mixing. You could use that "acid" beat somewhere during the verse, it would sound interesting and different.
Ok, good shit overall but you still have something to work on, keep it up bro

7/10