Marry

[bfence]

This is my newest track. I SUCK!!!! DONT LISTEN!!!!!!!!!

http://www.zshare.net/audio/marry3-mp3.html

EDIT:

http://soundclick.com/bfence

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

i aint donwloading no bogus shit from you i dont trust ya

up in on zshare

[bfence]

I dont got a link nor am i tryin to be banned. its a real track to the stan beat.

i aint donwloading no bogus shit from you i dont trust ya

up in on zshare

EDIT: But dont click any thing i PM to YOU cuz ur a FAG!

Plus it says its a fuckin MP3 file you faggot!

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

I dont got a link nor am i tryin to be banned. its a real track to the stan beat.

i aint donwloading no bogus shit from you i dont trust ya

up in on zshare

EDIT: But dont click any thing i PM to YOU cuz ur a FAG!

Plus it says its a fuckin MP3 file you faggot!

so still aint donwloading it, you have soundclick why not up it on there..i need a good laugh

[bfence]

I forgot the password but i got it. Dawg im fuckin better than you. I dont know what your talkin about.

[ThomasAguanis]

*listening now*

verse 1
so far it's pretty good. a few parts i couldn't understand though
flows pretty good too.

verse 2
same as 1st but flow was a bit different. I like this concept though.

verse 3
lyrics are best in this so far. flow is good like other verses too.

overall:
good song man. I like the concept a lot. You have pretty good lyrics too. Keep it up

[Xray]

yo maybe did u delete my post

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

this actually sounds like a normal song, everything is good through-out it,

is the second verse you being marry jane

anywae good song man

in 2 weeks we are battlin since you got a mic

[bfence]

Thanks for the feed. Thank you Bar for not hatin on my shit for the fuck of it.

Yeah the 2nd verse is supposed to be Marry (Jane).

As for us battling...my mic aint gonna be here in two weeks. I had this shit written for a lil and my bro came down so i banged the track out...i got another one to bang out then hes leavin. And im not really down for internet battling i feel its a waste of time. I guage how good people are by their tracks that they make. Maybe i'll battle some one i know and post it up. Thats how i feel, say what you want or respect it.

Uppin for more feed.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

Thanks for the feed. Thank you Bar for not hatin on my shit for the fuck of it.

Yeah the 2nd verse is supposed to be Marry (Jane).

As for us battling...my mic aint gonna be here in two weeks. I had this shit written for a lil and my bro came down so i banged the track out...i got another one to bang out then hes leavin. And im not really down for internet battling i feel its a waste of time. I guage how good people are by their tracks that they make. Maybe i'll battle some one i know and post it up. Thats how i feel, say what you want or respect it.

Uppin for more feed.

i aint hating never have hated never will hate, you just didnt beileive me last time lol

and cool bout battlin was you who started asking for the audio battle and shit but sa'll good if your gonni be kool bout it

[bfence]

Yeah we cool.

And Let me get some constructive critism. What could be better on the first two verses?

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

Yeah we cool.

And Let me get some constructive critism. What could be better on the first two verses?

i thought both of them were kool, although the third verse was best, the story and everyhting on them were kool switching it and being marry jane was some nice work aswell made it more intresting, really maybe just some parts delivery dipped but it wasnt a big issue lyricaly they were nice but everyhting could always be better lyrically so that wasnt really a big issue either, really just keep practicing, you have improved since the last stuff you posted, so id be intrested to hear a energetic song from you now just to see how good you really are

by the way if you give feed on the first couple of tracks in here youll receive more/better feed

[MoBrat]

serious an eminem beat anyway flow is good, lyrically not bad song but personally the eminem beat ruined it 4 me

[Call Me Pik]

i agree the concept of the song is real good i woulda never thought of it since i automatically revert the beat to eminem's song some of the lyrics coulda flowed better but overall songs a B+ nice job

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

serious an eminem beat anyway flow is good, lyrically not bad song but personally the eminem beat ruined it 4 me

why ? its just like using a dre or timbaland beat a beat 50 cent rapped on, its just like using any other insturmental