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[NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 15th, '07, 14:55

The Track

Ok, well i was trying something new with this beat (witch i asked for custom, you'll know what i mean when ya listen) and personely im still sitting on the wall wondering if it worked or not, the track itself is a deep track goin through sort of 3 stages with the verses and 2 interludes (again something new), well since people always say try to go out the safe zone, i did, wether it worked or not is up to you, coz i cant even decide.


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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jun 15th, '07, 15:00

typin while listen...

kool feel to it... :y: lol...u really improve ur "diffrent style" hehe...
nice beat also...propz to mart...
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby mart85 » Jun 15th, '07, 16:24

yeah, personally I really like the track, your lyrics are real good and deep, but I listened to it yesterday in my mp3 player, and I think what is not perfect with the song is the aggressive parts, maybe they would have to be a little less aggressive :sweating:... I didn't realize it at first, when mixing the song, but now after like a month or 2, I think that's what should be different... especially the first few lines of the aggressive parts, to have a "smoother" transition maybe... but still, I like the track and like you said, you have to try new things, that's the best way you can improve :y:
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby bg_pop » Jun 15th, '07, 16:46

Wow The beat is great good job mart :worship:
About the verses yeah I think you must be more agresive :):):)
But I like it :)But I think here it is the same problem with the breath I think you should work more when you make verses.I mean Repeat the verse about 30 or 40 times like me and you will understand where you must stop and star again but I like your flow
The song is deep :):):):)and i like this type of songs :)
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ThomasAguanis » Jun 15th, '07, 17:01

listening now.
i like this beat. really good feel to it :y: you flow nicely on this. When the beat changes a bit it sounds like you're shouting. the interlude was good. lyrics are pretty sick. this time when the beat changes a bit you don't shout as much which was better. again, interlude was good, it adds a different element to the track and works really well. flow's still good on the beat and lyrics are up to par with previous verses.nice song man. keep it up :y:
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby B.A.D. » Jun 15th, '07, 17:58

nice beat.... just the perfect lay back n smoke sum type

the first verse is kool!, I like the flow its kinda diferent, but good

hook wuz not my style

the first interlude is good, nice diferent twist u got there

verse 2 is great, and you fit perfectly on the beat change

interlude 2 goes deeper, its a nice thing to listen about how you express with music... nice

verse 3 has a tired feelig on it, but fixes up fast, good lyrics although It feels like shorter

good track mayn... lovin it! 10/10
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby die2nite » Jun 16th, '07, 01:18

I really like this. The beat is amazing and you flow well on it. Lyrics are amazing. You managed to put quite a few multies into a personal-type song which is impressive. I like the interludes instead of choruses as well although I feel the first interlude was too long. Maybe it was just me but I didn't even notice the aggressiveness. I can tell something changed, but it doesn't sound aggressive to me. But I like it. Props on this, it's deep and a good story.
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 16th, '07, 01:40

typin while listen...

kool feel to it... lol...u really improve ur "diffrent style" hehe...
nice beat also...propz to mart...
good job


thx man, appreciate it :worship:

yeah, personally I really like the track, your lyrics are real good and deep, but I listened to it yesterday in my mp3 player, and I think what is not perfect with the song is the aggressive parts, maybe they would have to be a little less aggressive ... I didn't realize it at first, when mixing the song, but now after like a month or 2, I think that's what should be different... especially the first few lines of the aggressive parts, to have a "smoother" transition maybe... but still, I like the track and like you said, you have to try new things, that's the best way you can improve


yeh im the same i aint sure about it, i wasnt sure about all the new stuff i was trying thats why im realeasing it all lol, n thx man :worship:

Wow The beat is great good job mart
About the verses yeah I think you must be more agresive :):)
But I like it But I think here it is the same problem with the breath I think you should work more when you make verses.I mean Repeat the verse about 30 or 40 times like me and you will understand where you must stop and star again but I like your flow
The song is deep :):):)and i like this type of songs


thx man, appreciate it :worship:


listening now.
i like this beat. really good feel to it you flow nicely on this. When the beat changes a bit it sounds like you're shouting. the interlude was good. lyrics are pretty sick. this time when the beat changes a bit you don't shout as much which was better. again, interlude was good, it adds a different element to the track and works really well. flow's still good on the beat and lyrics are up to par with previous verses.nice song man. keep it up


thanx man :worship:

nice beat.... just the perfect lay back n smoke sum type

the first verse is kool!, I like the flow its kinda diferent, but good

hook wuz not my style

the first interlude is good, nice diferent twist u got there

verse 2 is great, and you fit perfectly on the beat change

interlude 2 goes deeper, its a nice thing to listen about how you express with music... nice

verse 3 has a tired feelig on it, but fixes up fast, good lyrics although It feels like shorter

good track mayn... lovin it! 10/10


thanx man, appreciate it :worship:

I really like this. The beat is amazing and you flow well on it. Lyrics are amazing. You managed to put quite a few multies into a personal-type song which is impressive. I like the interludes instead of choruses as well although I feel the first interlude was too long. Maybe it was just me but I didn't even notice the aggressiveness. I can tell something changed, but it doesn't sound aggressive to me. But I like it. Props on this, it's deep and a good story.


thanx man, im glad you noticed with the multi's, just when i was writing this track i remember trying to fit them in but keep a very strong story/meaning, something i havent did to well in the past, thanx for checking man, appreciate it :worship:
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 16th, '07, 04:18

Sarah wrote:It's a very different style. Real deep. It's good :y: keep it up ;)


Nice beat too mart :y:

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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby randomghost » Jun 16th, '07, 08:40

beat is hot as fuck (THANX TOO MART FOR ALL HOT BEATS HE IS PRODUCIN I REALLY ENJOY HEARING THEM) :y: ....flow is crazy man...the parts were u shout is hot too man..i can feel ya :happy: ...lovin the track man..i repeated 4 times now :happy: ..good job :worship: :worship: ..
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 16th, '07, 16:06

randomghost wrote:beat is hot as fuck (THANX TOO MART FOR ALL HOT BEATS HE IS PRODUCIN I REALLY ENJOY HEARING THEM) :y: ....flow is crazy man...the parts were u shout is hot too man..i can feel ya :happy: ...lovin the track man..i repeated 4 times now :happy: ..good job :worship: :worship: ..



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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby $0 R3@L » Jun 16th, '07, 16:30

good track man,decent lyrics and a strong concept.

Marts production is great here too.

Was an enjoyable listen so props :y:
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jun 16th, '07, 21:17

$0 R3@L wrote:good track man,decent lyrics and a strong concept.

Marts production is great here too.

Was an enjoyable listen so props :y:


thx man :worship: glad you enjoyed it :happy:
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Re: [NEW] Bar - My Story Through Flow(Produced By Mart85)

Postby randomghost » Jun 18th, '07, 11:50

bump for this :smoking:
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