Tha Day Came

[Rain Matrix]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/3497884b8195a5/

[Kojack]

Noise pollution

[DelinQuent]

you're not rapping, you're reading. work on the emphasis and try to flow to the beat, try to your rhymes on the snares. get a better mic too, no offense. save some money they're not super expensive.

[Rain Matrix]

ok I'll try to spread out tha flow a little and work on mixing

[DelinQuent]

i don't think it's so much the mixing. you're rhymes are solid you just need to work the rhymes into the right spot in the verse. when you write, listen to the beat and try to write it so your rhymes hit when the snare hits. it'll turn out much better. it's tough to get the hang of but once you do it it's easy.

[Kez]

Everything needs improving except the rhymes, which you've nailed.

[Rain Matrix]

ok so I'll I just keep at it then thanx a million guys

[Tash8]

you gotta make it sound more like a rap song rather than those friday night poetry talks in the mic

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make your stuff simple and easy to flow, start off at the bottom n work up, have it like


verse

----------- rhyme* rhyme -----------rhyme* rhyme
----------- rhyme* rhyme -----------rhyme* rhyme

* = snare on the beat


thats simple and you got the lyrics to be able to keep that structure the same through-out the full track

once you master that simple style you got a basis

[Kojack]

You really think he can master even the basics?

[Block]

You really think he can master even the basics?

Who are you to be condescending toward ANYONE? NO ONE HERE LIKES YOU DUDE! Not to mention half your shit doesn't rhyme, and no one can barely understand you.

Just learn how to write to a beat, Rain. I've only made one audio myself, but it's easy to get the hang of after a while. Your pronunciation is good, just need more 'umph' on the multies and rhymes. Alot of that depends on how it's mixed, aswell (ad libs and emphasizing the lyrics) just keep doing your thing man.

[Kojack]

You really think he can master even the basics?

Who are you to be condescending toward ANYONE? NO ONE HERE LIKES YOU DUDE! Not to mention half your shit doesn't rhyme, and no one can barely understand you.

Ok porky. Whatever u say