First Verse Ever (2 Verse Up Now)

[Robbie G]

I liked it but for me the beat was loud and I couldn't really hear you well lol.

[Robbie G]

"i'll rip off ur tits, end of my wits
rap so hard the track skips in places
hanging you with dirty shoe laces
so there ain't no traces of this cunt
i'm not racist, i hate all races, hunt
you down"

The ending is pretty sick but you seem to end it in a weird spot. If it was me i'd finish the line to make it sound better like "hunt you down, shoot ya and take the crown" but yeah just something so it doesn't end mid-line.

[Robbie G]

sweet, in my opinion best stuff i've seen from you.

[Robbie G]

It was pretty decent but why were there random pauses in the song? It kinda ruined the flow for me.

Damn, wish I had a mic so I could record.

[Kez]

#1 - First Track Ever:
Intro's alright
Can't hear a word. From what i can hear your delivery aint too bad, but the lyrics are a bit simple, and i can't hear a word at all.

#2 - Dead To Rights:
I've always loved this beat
Your quality sounds pretty bad, too low and buzzy
When you began rapping i thought you were talking in the intro of the song, and then you just stopped midway through. Flow completely off the beat, lyrics as you said were simple so not much good and as for delivery and that it's still too quiet and shy and that, you need more presence on the mic kinda thing.

#3 - Monotauk Project:
Again, another Eminem beat
Hmm..i'll let it go since i did this kinda thing when i was starting out, it's good for practice
Again vocals too low, and your delivery is alright-ish, still a bit quiet. Flow is pretty much non-existant. I can barely hear anything, lyrics are again simple type things, your quality i can hear some popping.

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[DelinQuent]

get a mic.... lmfao. j/p

i think the reason you don't flow well is because you're not on beat with the snares. find the snares in the beat and try to hit rhymes on those to start.

but as you said practice practice practice. keep working

p.s i just posted a new song