DQ is Still Alive... Rock City

[DelinQuent]

just dled the instrumental and did a verse to it just to keep everyone informed that i AM indeed still alive and rapping. don't sleep on this
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lyrics-i lift em up hit em up, give a fuck? never bruh/
trust me you don't want it son, see the roll i been on/
i been on my grind dawg, not a day when i'm gone/
so tighten up ya tampon, i'm the shit therefore/
call me your landlord, cause i own the plot/
get ya eyes off my spot, cause i call the shots/
don't wanna call you pac, come and get the drama/
cause i love when it pops, you in love with the cops/
see my run never stops, and i'm board like checkers/
so i'm here to change the game, rearrange the frame/
i am the new foudation, fuck caucasian/
this ain't black or white, it's about wack or tight/
for whoever grabs the mic, cause you all act alike/
pop guns got funds rich as a motherfucker/
shot slugs hot son, just another fuckin sucker/
leachin off the system, i'm reachin out to get ya/
believe it i will hit ya, you ain't squeezin off a pistol/
ain't even got a cap gun, just another re-run/
fast forward he's done, i'm so sick see boy?/
you just a retard, need lies to lean on/
a week from now you'll be gone, faggot you a pee on/
a pussy playin possum, blink once i gotcha/
i'm the definition of what is hottness/
see i got this, spittin so flawless/
livin life lawless, everynight doggie/

this is my rock city, and you rock wit me/
my flows pop heavy, like dum didee didee/
you come with me really, son don't be silly/
my flows so cold, yes my flows so coldddd/

[DelinQuent]

shit, those two lines were my favorite lmao. different strokes for different folks.
and it wasn't so much a chorus, just kinda an outro i guess.

but good lookin out, i always like an honest opinion

[<Stiiccy>]

you need to turn the beat up a lil
i think your voice sounded like you were tryin to do some club shit but the beat was idk
but it was good
keep at it homie

[DelinQuent]

yeah, i'm not so hot at mixing, i tend to have my pellas too low or too high.

i appreciate all criticism. thanks guys

[Xray]

beat is okay..your lyrics were your average work, your flow was on point..but your overlays and adlibs need to be fixed cause atm they're messing up the verse and the chorus was horrible you should re-record chorus and the effect u used sucked also so work more on mixing next time..other than that cool song not your best tho

[Speech]

first of all, beat up on volume haha, then overlays down on volume, then.... nothing
cool shit
i was reading the lyrics along listening, so i could "figure how it flows"...i did real bad , but you ripped it haha
nice to hear sth. from you...if you wanna do an album or a mixtape or just some trax, holla at me for mixin cuz i'm trying to figure out how my ways to mix goes with other ppl's acapellas, holla
just a short verse, with that beat, you could have made a real hood banger boi
for your lyrics, i liked em cuz they were simple, but performed fresh, freestyle-like, loved them
keep it up 8 / 10
peace

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

fresh one verse track...delievery was dope
some volume problems as spizzy said... and as spizzy said again...simple lyrics

[DelinQuent]

thanks everyone.
as for the effect on the end, listen to it with headphones, i panned it. without headphones is sounds odd, but i think it sounds better with headphones, butttt i could be crazy lol.
i really do appreciate all comments, thanks guy.

[C-Game]

vocals/beat ratio was wrong man...

the flow was there with an average set of lyrics..
keep it up bro...

[mart85]

yeah the fact that the vocals were too loud really didn't help... the verse seemed cool, your voice/delivery was good but sometimes it kinda sounded like you were rushing your lines to be on beat... but maybe it's because the beat was too low I don't know... it has potential tho keep it up man

[DelinQuent]

yeah yeah damnt next time ill turn down the vocals lol. Thanks for all the feedback.

[B.A.D.]

word

man, u got the same problem I do on the layovers... we need ta fix that

the quality is clean but not perfect... hot verse tho'

the flow is diferent but excelent on the same way, lyrics r tight

nice ta keep hearin from ya

yo, I posted the golden age, got u on 2 tracks, chek it out man

[DelinQuent]

i shall do so ax lol thanks for the feed man