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NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 2nd, '08, 04:36

I figure id try to make a story type rap for yall
its called "im goin insane"
peep it: http://www.zshare.net/audio/8336588448d294/
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby Tash8 » Mar 2nd, '08, 05:24

yea chorus is horrible

but ur improving, flow is better this time
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Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 2nd, '08, 05:24

Chet wrote:ummmm the chorus needs alot of work

don't take this the wrong way

the hook isnt what your supposed to pay attention to
its the lyrics homie
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Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 2nd, '08, 05:30

Chet wrote:yea but if it doesn't sound good then that takes away from the lyrics, maybe just say the chorus in your normal voice instead of that whisper thing

i do like your flow, you have some busta rhymes moments ever now and then

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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby Xray » Mar 2nd, '08, 09:58

big ax-d, me, random ghost, delinquent already made a song to this :p and your song was alright just you need to spend more time mixing to make it sound better and i agree with the others the chorus was trash it didn't have good lyrics nor flow or energy or good mixing..so i suggest you re-record the chorus and spend time on the mixing..and the intro was pissing me off cause you said the word story like 50 times :confusion: sounded like this is your first time telling a story..anyways i see little improvement from your older tracks so thats good :y:

PS: Work On Your Mixing If You Want Anyone To Enjoy Your Songs :y:


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Postby Big Proof 4ever » Mar 2nd, '08, 10:53

i think its pretty good song,but while listening intro i falled in sleep,too long,as all said chorus is horrible and decent lyrics,just keep workin and everything will be aight :y: peace :b:
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby Speech » Mar 2nd, '08, 22:34

i liked this..won say shit about quality, you know :sweating:
hmm only part i really enjoyed was the first...lol concepts was cool...no fake gangster shit and nothing...great...the chorus, oh well i don mind about that (even though it's crappy haha)

hmm...you ain doing this too long so i can't go hard on you...for a beginner, there is potential man, deffinately :y:
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Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 2nd, '08, 23:32

Speech wrote:i liked this..won say shit about quality, you know :sweating:
hmm only part i really enjoyed was the first...lol concepts was cool...no fake gangster shit and nothing...great...the chorus, oh well i don mind about that (even though it's crappy haha)

hmm...you ain doing this too long so i can't go hard on you...for a beginner, there is potential man, deffinately :y:
keep it up

Ive been rappin for a year so if thats a beginner :y: :y:
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby B.A.D. » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:20

hmm its hard to feed on this since I already made a masterpiece on this beat along with other fellow members

hahaha I have the beat leased so no tags yeah hahaha

the quality is good in a listen-wise way, but it sucks cuz sounds too empty, but the noise reduction was perfect, the layovers can be lowered down a bit, and you have the same problem I do with them lol, tryna make em match the beat...

the story concept is good, also the verse lyrics, its a nice one, but you rush a lot on rhyming, and you could've tried a better lyricism, but its ok, specially cuz you ain't been doing this a lot, so its nice

the hook, well hahaha lol.... u can do better

overall, nice work, def needs some work on it, but practice makes the master... and also I enjoyed listening to this... good work man :worship:

if you can give me feed back on my album THE GOLDEN AGE it would be much appreciated, its on a topic on this same audio stage.

peace :y:
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Postby liljon » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:25

the first part was sweet i would give it 7 out of 10 :)
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:28

30-3 wrote:hmm its hard to feed on this since I already made a masterpiece on this beat along with other fellow members

hahaha I have the beat leased so no tags yeah hahaha

the quality is good in a listen-wise way, but it sucks cuz sounds too empty, but the noise reduction was perfect, the layovers can be lowered down a bit, and you have the same problem I do with them lol, tryna make em match the beat...

the story concept is good, also the verse lyrics, its a nice one, but you rush a lot on rhyming, and you could've tried a better lyricism, but its ok, specially cuz you ain't been doing this a lot, so its nice

the hook, well hahaha lol.... u can do better

overall, nice work, def needs some work on it, but practice makes the master... and also I enjoyed listening to this... good work man :worship:

if you can give me feed back on my album THE GOLDEN AGE it would be much appreciated, its on a topic on this same audio stage.

peace :y:


thanks homie i really appriciate it
and yeah ill give yo album a listen
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby Nu Syd » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:50

nice song man,and really, who gives a fuck about quality now days, if quality makes you nice than soulja boy is king. smh @ people who pay attention to the wrong things.

enjoyable song, IMO you should have flowed the chorus different and work on your flow,but besides that. Stay up :b:
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Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:53

Nu Syd wrote:nice song man,and really, who gives a fuck about quality now days, if quality makes you nice than soulja boy is king. smh @ people who pay attention to the wrong things.

enjoyable song, IMO you should have flowed the chorus different and work on your flow,but besides that. Stay up :b:


thanks man,,and you are right now a days people pay attention to the wrong things
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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby Nu Syd » Mar 3rd, '08, 03:59

always, not only on this forum,on others to, you can have the illest rhymers, but is using cheap mics then people call'em wack coz the quality is bad,oh well, the same people who throw those opinions usually change anyway once they grow and learn what makes the song.
Aslong as its decent and the quality doesn't get in the way where you cant hear some of the rhymes,then I don't care how/what the quality is.

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Re: NEW TRACK YALL!!! IT HAS A STORY

Postby <Stiiccy> » Mar 3rd, '08, 04:20

Nu Syd wrote:always, not only on this forum,on others to, you can have the illest rhymers, but is using cheap mics then people call'em wack coz the quality is bad,oh well, the same people who throw those opinions usually change anyway once they grow and learn what makes the song.
Aslong as its decent and the quality doesn't get in the way where you cant hear some of the rhymes,then I don't care how/what the quality is.

my 2cents.

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