My Life pt 1

[<VerbalTouch>]

Verse 1 unfinished collab expect it to be better in the end

http://boomp3.com/listen/ei52gpj/mylife

[wotwasithistime]

alright... I'll critique the best i can.

The beat sounds like its behind you, like you didnt do this in a multi-track. It could just be me or maybe the mixing. Also, your voice sounds like you're whispering. It takes time to get used to the mic, or maybe you dont want people to hear you? Best you can do it just yell it out first-off. Then get on the mic and spit it like you mean it.

Also, another thing i figured out for myself was to write shit that means something to you. dont just write shit to put a song out, cos you wont get the right emotion in it and it'll never sound right to you. write with feeling and put that same emotion you used whilst writing, into the final piece.

Hope this helps, even tho you were an asshole to me.

[<VerbalTouch>]

Who were you? I wasn't been an asshole to anyone just given my opinion but yeah thanks for the feed bro

[Darkblade44431]

from what i heard of the lyrics, they were decent. but, two REALLY IMPORTANT things:
1, SPEAK THE FUCK UP!
2, PUT SOME FUCKIN EMOTION IN THERE!
if u get those two things, this rap will sound a whole lot better. lol, and dont take it harshly, i'm just bein an ass.

[Kez]

Who were you? I wasn't been an asshole to anyone just given my opinion but yeah thanks for the feed bro

Uh i believe it's K Block.

[DelinQuent]

you sound like youre trying to be quiet so no one in your house hears you lol. didnt seem to flow well, but i couldnt really judge due to the weak delivery. step up delivery and ya might have something. hot beat btw.

off topic- what did k block do to get banned?

[<VerbalTouch>]

thanks everyone i think yoshi banned him

[Darkblade44431]

btw, i forgot to tell you. on the first part, dont breath so much, lol, sounds like u got asthma.

[<VerbalTouch>]

btw, i forgot to tell you. on the first part, dont breath so much, lol, sounds like u got asthma.

i actually do have a little...

uppin for some more

[<VerbalTouch>]

[Darkblade44431]

lol, well then control your asthma.

[<VerbalTouch>]

lol, well then control your asthma.

I said I got alittle dont e a dick now..

[B.A.D.]

can u zhare

that site ain't workin 4 me