SajN - Northern Lights (My verse)

[SajN]

Hey people..
These two are my very first audios, and they are not mixed or anything... just straight recorded and saved.
The both tracks are the same, but with a little difference.

Since I am new in the audio "business" I would like some feed you would give to a newbie.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/121236372d2c6dee/

this one ^ is just 21 seconds.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/12123651b4637f1b/

this one^ is the full verse.


Any feed is good for me


and yeah.... SajN is my name

Lyrics:

From the day I discovered this beautiful light
I felt I had the power and the spiritual inside
A lyrical vibe deciding to give it a try
A tribe of mics, I got the eager to write
And price the musics masterpiece,
The rap, hip-hop, the real arts are these
For them the place in my heart increased
And it started to beat cuz of rap, just for that,
It was my combustion, trust me,
I was nuthin’ without it
Just an ass and a rotten coward
but this rap power made me escape it
so my life wouldn’t be wasted, it saved me
that’s why me and Jay-19 retaliates it,
by doin’ the same and praise it,
Raise it to the top within the northern lights
It’s Hip-Hop, so our countries will be modernized,
Ï'm talking about Sweden and Norway right.
I fight for us, but not for cash
And even if I turn to trash,
I will never turn into another Gayne fag
and ruin the main rap, and turn it into just plain crap.
So Jay-19 and me are fighting to keep it real,
that created and still is creating the rap. It gave us strength.
Now we're paying it back, with the message we just sent

[Jay-19]

I've already said what I think. You got the flow and all. But you need to work on the pronunciation and the delivery a little bit. Can't wait till I record my verse and we can get this track done!

[B.A.D.]

not mixed?

sounds real nice for being a raw version

aite

u gotta work on your flow, first of all.... keep practicing and freestlying to beats and repeating other's music so u get the flow, when u master that, all the rest is piece of cake

but first work on that, then the mixing aspects, then all the rest

but sounds excelent for bein ur first audio

[Slimm]

for first audio i think its pretty good man..

i liked ur flow but u can work on ur accent and try to articulate more.

[SajN]

Thanks for the feed guys

Yes, I got to work on the pronounciation and the delivery.

Killah: Take ur time Thanks man!

Big Ax-D: yup, it's not mixed. I heard my mic is pretty good Thanks man

Slimm: Thanks for checking out! Working on the accent

Appreciate the feeds


Keep them coming people

[Steve Spag]

Pretty good for your first audio. Your pronunciation could be better, and next time try and make your voice a little more loud aswell, that always helps. But good shit man, keep it up.

[<VerbalTouch>]

Yo Lol when I saw heard the 21 sec I was like wtf is this the utro Lol

But after hearing the full verse it aint bad for your first bt you sohuld pm these guys and ask them to help mix for ou they pros with this shit

Lookin forward to hearin some more out of you.

[Xray]

your strugglin big time on your english, i think it would be better and easier for you to just rap in Norwegian?

[Kosovic]

your strugglin big time on your english, i think it would be better and easier for you to just rap in Norwegian?

U wanna rap in arabian?

[Xray]

^^^lol if i could read and write and speak proper arabic i'd be rapping half arabic half english

[Kosovic]

^^^lol if i could read and write and speak proper arabic i'd be rapping half arabic half english

Son, i tryina write a rap in greek but im having problems cuz finding words to rhyme in english is easier. Maybe i should try serbian.

[SajN]

Pretty good for your first audio. Your pronunciation could be better, and next time try and make your voice a little more loud aswell, that always helps. But good shit man, keep it up.

Thanks man! appreciate it

Yo Lol when I saw heard the 21 sec I was like wtf is this the utro Lol

But after hearing the full verse it aint bad for your first bt you sohuld pm these guys and ask them to help mix for ou they pros with this shit

Lookin forward to hearin some more out of you.

Yeah thanks man! I haven't started with mixing yet. Want to get better in audio first

I can mix one or two songs for you, but no more than that. I have pro equipment so it will increase quality... as far as advice, practice pronunciation. Take words you say awkwardly, and say them over and over until your voice recognizes the different tones that specific word needs.

I'll PM you when I need a song mixed
I'm trying to practise my pronounciation Thanks man!

your strugglin big time on your english, i think it would be better and easier for you to just rap in Norwegian?

So you think that?
I don't like rapping in norwegian, it ain't like english you know. Norwegian don't have so good rhyme-connections, if u know what I mean

[Xray]

oh ok cool man, but would be cool if you can spit Norwegian & English on tracks. makes it more entertaining and interesting to hear but yeah keep working on your pronunciation. and your microphone is dope man lucky mafucker

[SajN]

oh ok cool man, but would be cool if you can spit Norwegian & English on tracks. makes it more entertaining and interesting to hear but yeah keep working on your pronunciation. and your microphone is dope man lucky mafucker

I have tried, but it didn't go so well. I can't do it in norwegian
Pronunciation is under work
You jealus at me cuz of my mic

Thanks man!

[Xray]

bumpin this