Outta My Mind-Untouchablez

[DelinQuent]

yes we're back finally. after a really long time of no new music from the Untouchablez (PikPocket and DelinQuent) we very recently completed a song. problem is we both have opposite work schedules and live far away from one another but we got some time and did this song.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/13106429bc9a9ccc/

it's a club type song, not really my thing but i felt like doing one.
Dq-1st verse
Pik-2nd verse
DQ-3rd verse
DQ-Chorus

LYRICS-
verse1-girl leave the club, and she leavin with me/
and i see them other dudes, sneakin a peek/
i just give em thumbs up, i ain't peepin for beef/
got my man pik with me, we can beat up the streets/
so find yaself a girl, and just let me be/
cause i'm living life free, you cant live it like me/
she behaves like a hoe, but wants no money/
2 live crew yeah me so horny/
so back it up hunny, get on top of me/
is that how you does it?, thought i had a phone call/
the way you got me buzzin, and now you got me on ya/
you play slave, and i'll be your owner/

hook-shorty what you doing, and ohh how you moving/
why you do that, you got me stupid/
got me losin, my my mind/
my my mind, my my mind/
i'm outta my mind, want you outta those clothes/
want you in my home, and i think you know/
that i want you bent ova, on my sofa/
on my sofa, on my sofa/

verse2-lookin like chocoalate looking so good.
you can tell by her face she misunderstood
34 24 oh my god
mono y mono got me bilingual
one back shot i'm on top
i know you have a man but heez not me
u know i aint swiss but im bout my cheese
slurrin like a lisp when she says please
let her splurge a lil bit get her out dem jeans
i sed out them jeans what you doubtin me
how bout how bout we fuck you clean
up my mess off your chest
you in distress im not impressed
turn to the right i sleep to the left
fuck this bitch i fucked this bitch
she screamin out pik....bitch i left

hook

verse3-say you got a man, ma'am i don't give a damn/
like a low rider truck, baby i'ma have you slammed/
give it to ya good, you be screamin loud/
snowy streets, yeah i'ma have you plowed/
fallin off the bed, we gon do it on the ground/
i'm talkin all smooth, yeah you think i'm sweet/
incredible hulk, baby i become a freak/
and i don't relations, i just want sex/
i don't got paitience, to kiss up on ya neck/
baby it's a bomb threat, just hit the deck/
don't worry baby, i'ma make sure you get it/
have ya scratchin my back, and yeah i'm sweaty/
call me lil wayne, cause i'ma make it rain/
and the way you scream, sounds like you in pain/
but i ain't gon stop, i ain't even slowin down/
let me get you on top, you be throwin me around/

[Kosovic]

This account is currently under review.

Up on zshare.

[DelinQuent]

you can still listen to it on my soundclick. just scroll down a bit and click lo-fi, hi-fi, or download

[Kosovic]

I tried. Same message.

[DelinQuent]

hmm when i click the link i can listen. i'll up it to zshare tho gimme a few mins

EDIT-i see what you mean now, when you actually click to listen it does that. fuck soundclick. zshare in 3 mins, thanks for the heads up

[Kosovic]

No problems.

[DelinQuent]

zshare now posted in my original post

[Kosovic]

Its ok, its catchy. I like it.

[DelinQuent]

catchy was the idea. thanks for the quick feedback.

[Kosovic]

Dont worry about it.

[<VerbalTouch>]

sucks :Y: lol nice joint there

[DelinQuent]

thanks but any more indepth feedback?

[Kosovic]

Well its a dance/fuck song....how indepth can a review be?

[DelinQuent]

lmfao

maybe critique my flow, the quality of the lyrics and chorus. ya know?

don't get me wrong, any feedback is appreciated but more indepth feedback would be better to help me improve

[Kosovic]

I dont know. I review as a whole, i dont break it down. Thats why i prefer reviewing albums and not single tracks. Up a tape and we see about it.