Comin' Up- Ice Killa

by **Requiem** » Aug 11th, '08, 19:43

This is my second attempt at an audio track. :unsure:

i think the verses are better than my first attempt, and fits the beat somewhat better.
the beat's alright, i made it myself, and it was the only thing i could find to fit the lyrics. all comments, suggestions are appreciated. just don't diss the track, use constructive criticism. :y:

http://www.zshare.net/audio/168772152d5f72be/

by **Requiem** » Aug 11th, '08, 19:49

got friends there, visited a couple of times. plus, i was just makin a point that soulja boy doesn't know what it means to be real, like in detroit. people serious there...

by **Requiem** » Aug 11th, '08, 19:55

lol, thanks for the feedback. :happy:

i know i'm going to get compared to Em, and if i ever get out there for real, i'm going to rep nc, where i'm from, but for the means of dissing soulja boy, he aint real like em, and detroit.

by **The GameKeeper** » Aug 11th, '08, 21:25

Liked the lyrics... flow wasnt too bad... a lil choppy like Chet said... delivery needs work... you sounded kind of bored when rapping... with some good emotion that could be a nice track man... you sounded sleepy or something... MORE emtion my man... beat was good... a good simple beat to flow over... liked the content and agree with it... kepp at it man... more emotion.

by **Requiem** » Aug 11th, '08, 22:59

Chet wrote:and send me a beat if you ever have a extra one....always nice to use stuff from guys I know

i gotta whole bunch of beats i'm not using, just pm me what kind you want, fast, hardcore, slow, etc., and i'll zshare a couple :happy:

by **Hadez** » Aug 12th, '08, 00:42

honest criticism? honestly it's hard to believe you when you say you're "hardcore" after watching those kung fu videos. but who am i to judge. try to up the enthusiasm when doin the rapping. should help it not be so boring.

by **Requiem** » Aug 12th, '08, 01:30

Hadez wrote:honest criticism? honestly it's hard to believe you when you say you're "hardcore" after watching those kung fu videos. but who am i to judge. try to up the enthusiasm when doin the rapping. should help it not be so boring.

lmfao, yea, those kung fu videos are a whole 'nother side of me. it's funny, I love rap music, but i write books, and make stupid videos. i'm like split personalities. lol

by **MoBrat** » Aug 12th, '08, 05:44

lyrics aint bad, flow could be better but not bad...up ur emotion get more into the words u spittin like gamekeeper said u sound bored so work on that...u kinda sound like u just reading ur words not feelin what u sayin chorus is decent but needs more emotion like i said before thats ur major flaw in this track good luck if u gonna re-record this...hope u will cause it can be a decent track