Let's Talk About Us

[Ka0t1c]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/814168141d1d01c1/

http://usershare.net/w7z46ekglvgg


thanx to mceddie for the beat



same beat as Chaos Exists but better fitting lyrics:




there's no need to panic, your man is right here
with your cure to keep you repaired, i'm your mechanic
the candle light to clear your sight from nightmares, how romantic
plus i'm the pilot who's steering you right
on your private air strip where our areas share
and i'll carry this flight higher than stairs
plus i admire your ears
so inside if you'd like karats to shine bright
i'll surprise you with a pair of ice chandeliers
cuz i care and you're nice, you are priceless, i swear
i could just stare in your eyes and disappear to experience life
is it science, i don't think it quite does compare
and i wouldn't experiment twice, i couldn't try it or dare
cuz you're dynamite i'd egnite and not spare
our alliance is rare cuz all the signs invite like arrows, not beware
so let's ride until we tear, girl, don't be shy, have no fear
tonight i will hold you tight, i am your teddy bear
or your chariot, just know i'm ready if you're really there
so before i buried it, will you sit in this chair?
and listen to the stereo for what it is that i blare
since it's time to get serious, i got an idea
but it might bring embarrassment
but don't fight it, it's gonna bring plenty tears
for maybe many years to come but you've been number one
my dear, way too long and something's to say that i want you to be aware of
well, i've become crazy in love, everyday, was it apparant
i want you to stay and talk about us, wanna hear it?


feedback
http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=99448

[Mr. Chambers]

link of feedback?

[B.A.D.]

usershare

Kaot1c.. I like the name.

Hmm.. you need to change the way you record cuz it sounds like if you have the song in the background on a computer-integrated microphone and no headphones. lol... that will not help you at all with quality or if you want people to enjoy your songs more. I had to turn the volume way up to enjoy it. you need to fix it up. its easy just download a program like cool edit pro. 2 or adobe audition and record into it. with headphones. After that you should also take care of some mixing to improve the overall quality.

you lyrics are good, well written but you are not flowing them correctly into the beat. its extremely monotone, so what u gotta do is switch the text writing style into a more audio an easier style at first to connect better with the listener. give a simple snare hit flow type and slowly you can switch into more complex flow swifts.

you need to show extra emotion. instead of only reading them to the beat. like u know? stand up, jump a bit and then get on with it, have extreme exitement for what you are doing.

if you follow all this simple steps you can get into a better recording environment and well, ultimately improve the songs

hope my feedback helped

[Nick. Y]

totally agree wit Big AX D , my advices about the song are pretty much the same

[classthe_king]

Your delivery was really bad...I don't understand how you're getting your voice to sound like that. Put some energy in your verse, act like you're having fun.