Camaro vs. Cosh

[WakeUpShow]

I'm telling you right now, you don't wanna fuck with me.
'cause I'll put you dawgs in a bag like a Chinese grocery.

Remember to wave when you see me on the road in a smashed up Camaro
cause i left him crying as i played "My Heart Cries" on the world's smallest cello.

Fuck a 16 i can smash you in an 8 verse.
Metaphors,Flow, and Multis in an 8? yeah, i keep it terse.

They say i'm Crooked cause i scare away beats weekly. the Schrute farm right out of the mud.
My shotguns reloaded as i shoot you bittersweetly. right in the fucking taste buds.


1-2. Dawgs (Friends) in a body bag. Chinese people eat dogs.

7-8. Crooked I releases a new song weekly. If you watch The Office (US) you would know that Dwight
Schrute owns a beat farm. The word reloaded ties in to the Crooked I line because his weekly
series is called "Hip-Hop weekly reloaded" It's bittersweet because i'm shooting you in the mouth
where you taste bitter and sweet things obviously.

[murphmanny]

line 7-8 were pretty good. maybe try to shorten it... just me tho

and i wasn't really feeling the first few bars, they aight

[WakeUpShow]

line 7-8 were pretty good. maybe try to shorten it... just me tho

and i wasn't really feeling the first few bars, they aight

yeah i know about 7-8 i couldn't really find a way to shorten them. and as for line 1-2, you don't like my chinese grocery line?

[murphmanny]

i wasn't aware that chinese people ate dogs lol

[WakeUpShow]

i wasn't aware that chinese people ate dogs lol

hahahah yeah they do

[classthe_king]

This wasn't a very good battle verse tbh, the first two lines were alright but nothing other than that really hurt the opponent. The last bar was an average thought but poorly executed. You were shoving too much in there. Also, you need some multis lol.

[WakeUpShow]

This wasn't a very good battle verse tbh, the first two lines were alright but nothing other than that really hurt the opponent. The last bar was an average thought but poorly executed. You were shoving too much in there. Also, you need some multis lol.

thanks for the feedback. and as for the multis i just take them if they come naturally, other than that i feel like multis can come off forced

[classthe_king]

This wasn't a very good battle verse tbh, the first two lines were alright but nothing other than that really hurt the opponent. The last bar was an average thought but poorly executed. You were shoving too much in there. Also, you need some multis lol.

thanks for the feedback. and as for the multis i just take them if they come naturally, other than that i feel like multis can come off forced

Yeah but you need multis in a battle verse so the punches hit harder.

[WakeUpShow]

actually wait, for some reason camaro posted his verse in the call out section
i'm gonna copy and paste it here

[WakeUpShow]

Here is Camaro's verse

I am sitting drinking tequila
and thinking how to kill ya
so I get out on stage breaking the rules
to bet out on rage makeing the fooles
and I am here to make it stop
that thing you call hip hop
cuz you said you have points of humanity
now I´m about to show ya points of authority
so forfeit to break
go forfeit to wake
all of you get up
all of who rap up
forfeit to game
forfeit to blame
all of you step up
all of who crap up
cuz you forgot to speak when you need
if you where a drug you´ll be slower than speed
this all was my rhyme

[WakeUpShow]

Worst battle I've seen in a while.

I think Camaro structured his really awkwardly and it might be considered to be > 8 bars.

I vote Cosh.

At least he had a relevant line.

for saying it was a terrible battle
for saying i win

thanks for the feedback