BILI vs Menzo (tourny battle 4)

[Spyder]

BILI
Fuck your feelings I`ll take`em in the midnight and flush them
In the dawn, teeth will take`em inside and crush them
I`ll be your longwood while I`m breaking your bones apart
And making four clones retard, now moans`ll start
I`m the fox in your hells kitchen sending you trojans
Its a virus in your Achilles heel,expanding like oceans
We`re hungry,but it`s not the same thirst,first,take my flame burst
Then I`ll shove an egg in your chick an" show you who came first


1,2)Feeling/fillings,http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0780622/ (teeth,dawn)...
3)Longwood is where Napoleon dies
5,6)Hells kitchen is a show on fox,trojan is the name of producer and its a PC virus,and a wooden horse in Troy
7,8)egg,chicken,who came first?I got the idea from this thread after I saw him laugh... viewtopic.php?f=21&t=110840&p=1623557#p1623557

Menzo
Call me Nostradamus cuz as you watch the comments
See my mocks are flawless, crystal ain't hard as diamond
Cuz Thermodynamically, I'm bringing the fire
I'm burning your raps with ease? Sing to the choir, but
Come to my side and succumb to being bite sized, bro
But its my prize, cumbersome, to eat you alive, goat
Recollect what i said at the beginnin’ of my bars
Check yo’ pants, one night stand, you were finished ‘fore the start


Line 2 – crystal/diamond = jewelery = flawless and ties in with line 3 (also a gay little Billy Crystal reference, no reason whatsoever)

Line 3 – thermodynamic is a part of crystallization

Line 5-6 – Billy Goats Gruff reference: my side = bridge, bite sized/eat you alive, goat = BILI (hence "Billy Goats")

Line 7 – Nostradamus, notorious for predicting events (like me predicting the outcome of this battle)

Line 8 - viewtopic.php?f=9&t=93210

[Spyder]

(3) Punchlines - BILI
(3) Personals - NA
(2) Multies - Menzo
(1) Flow - BILI
(1) Structure - TIE
(1) Vocab/Complex - Menzo
(1) Other - NA

4-3 BILI

bad battle imo sorry but being honest.

BILI gotta have more complex rhymes in there man, make more direct punches and shit i know u can do,
Menzo your lines were all over the place, didnt rhyme in couplets which threw off the flow for me.
whole battled lacked personals on a good level.
who ever makes it to next round better step up

[ThomasAguanis]

(3) Punchlines- BILI- the "egg" one did it.
(3) Personals- N/A- were not present in this battle.
(2) Multies- BILI- both verses used multis alright, but I feel BILI used them more efficiently.
(1) Flow- BILI- I felt it flowed easier than Menzo's verse.
(1) Structure- Tie- both had points where structure was off a bit.
(1) Vocab/Complex- Menzo- vocab was more original, but some lines were overly complex.
(1) Other- using "Thermodynamically" in a battle - Menzo- self explanatory.

7-3 BILI

BILI- Your verse was good, but you'll have to step your game up for future opponents. You have a good grasp of how to use multis, but I still feel you can improve them. Same goes for punches. Personals are hard to use in text battles online, but try to find a creative way to throw at least one in during a future battle. Name-play would be beneficial too, but there's not always a lot of ways to do this, it's all dependent on what your opponent's name is. Not sure what else I can really say here so I'll end it with this: with experience, you shall improve greatly. You certainly have the potential to.

Menzo- Your verse wasn't bad, but it really wasn't too good either. You do know how to use multis, but I don't think you use them properly. I'm not sure what you were trying to do with the ",but," ",bro", ",goat" bit, but it didn't work. It threw the flow off completely and took away from your verse. Your lines were pretty creative, but I feel you stretched a bit too far in trying to be overly creative. Same with being complex. You have a lot to improve on, but seem to be on the right track. Keep battling and you too shall improve greatly. The potential is there.

[Spyder]

bili takes it two zero